Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line chart illustrate details on the number of take part for various activities at once community center in Melbourne, Australia for the time between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, all the number of participants are rose whereas Amateur dramatics are fell. Table tennis was sharply rose. Martial arts was fluctuated change. And Musical performances not available in baseline year.
In 2000, Film club was highly participants people at 64% then graph in next 10 year sight fell but after their grew but change was normal. Martial art was at 45% in 2000 but after graph was vary and in 2020 at 45% same as in intial year. In 2000 Amateur dramatics was at 35% then in 2005 gradual increased 2% then gramatic dropped at only at 5%.
In 2020, Table tennis was less people participants compare to other gave activities. Then next 10 year graph was stabilize, but after graph was rapidly at 52%. Musical performances not able in baseline year and show in 2005 after they increase and in 2020 graph at 20%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting on various activities from the line chart. However, the response falls short of fully meeting the requirements. While an overview is attempted, it contains inaccurate summaries, such as claiming that 'Amateur dramatics are fell' while misinterpreting other trends. Furthermore, many of the specific figures cited are incorrect or confused; for instance, the student states that the Film club was at '64%' in 2000 (when it was 64 participants, not percentages) and provides inaccurate values for Martial arts and Table tennis throughout the body paragraphs. The data is poorly selected and frequently misread against the chart. Consequently, this performance aligns with Band 4.5 to 5.0, reflecting limited and inaccurate reporting of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response attempts to use paragraphing with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is weak and the overall organization is disjointed. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as abrupt transitions ('Then next 10 year graph was stabilize, but after graph was rapidly at 52%'). Sentences often lack logical connections, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the development of ideas. The inappropriate use of basic transition words and disjointed sentence ordering lead to a low coherence score. This performance corresponds to Band 4.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that impede understanding. Examples include 'number of take part' instead of 'number of participants', 'once community center' instead of 'one social centre', and misuse of verbs and nouns such as 'highly participants people', 'sight fell', and 'gramatic dropped'. The student struggles with basic lexical items and fails to use appropriate vocabulary to describe trends or data accurately. This demonstrates a limited lexical range with noticeable errors that frequently cause difficulty for the reader, fitting Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying on simple sentence structures that are frequently ungrammatical. There is a persistent lack of control over basic verb forms, tense consistency, and sentence construction. Examples of severe grammatical errors include 'The line chart illustrate details', 'all the number of participants are rose', 'Martial arts was fluctuated change', and 'Musical performances not able in baseline year'. These persistent errors cause significant strain on the reader and demonstrate a lack of command over simple and complex sentence forms alike, positioning the grammar at Band 4.0.
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