Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the given paragraph five different activities are shown that happened in the two decades from 2000 to 2020. where, the most stable activity from the start till end was film club activity , then the martial arts were the second that fluctuate but little bit till end of the second decade. while the ,Amateur dramatics was the activity that fluctuate the most and fall most as compare to all the other activities happend during the period . Table tennis was the the one that rise with the time soo far . while the, Musical performances was the kind of activity that rise with the time not too much but it doesn't falls downwards in the given graph.

The film club have little-bit more than 60 participants in the begening .but, till then end of the two decades that n8umbers sometimes falls down but at the end that numbers was almost the same as the start .

Martial arts also have the participant in-between 30-40 ,and the same situation was there that with time , number of participants goes up and down but at the end of the decades that numbers was almost same like starts.

Amateur dramatics have the participants between 20-30 in the begining but with the passage of time that number falls down and at the end of the deacades that number was much low as they falls to less than 10, that activity was the worst activity which face that much down fall and never grows.

Table tennis was the activity that grows more than the any other , At the start there was the participants between 10-20 but with the time the number grows and at the end of the decade , it was more then 50 participants.

Musical performances starts in 2005 with no participant but with the time it rises and at the end the participants was between 15-20.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response attempts to cover the main trends in the line graph, identifying the stability of the film club, the fluctuations in martial arts, the steep decline in amateur dramatics, and the significant growth in table tennis and musical performances. However, the overview is weak, integrated awkwardly into the opening sentence without a clear summary of the overall trends. Furthermore, there are some minor misreadings of the data, such as stating that musical performances started in 2005 with no participants when the graph shows zero in 2000 and 2005 before rising in 2010. While all activities are addressed and supported with data points, the lack of a proper overarching summary keeps this at a Band 5.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, with an introduction followed by individual body paragraphs for each activity. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor referencing, repetitive sentence structures, and awkward linking words such as 'where,', 'while the,', and 'till then end'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. Cohesive devices are either misused or punctuated incorrectly, with comma splices and run-on clauses appearing throughout. For example, sentences frequently begin with conjunctions or prepositional phrases followed immediately by commas breaking the flow. While the overall arrangement of discussing one activity per paragraph provides some basic structure, the execution lacks fluency and clear logical organisation, aligning with Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student uses a limited and repetitive range of vocabulary suited to the task, such as 'activities', 'participants', 'rise', 'falls', and 'numbers'. There are numerous word choice and collocation issues, including 'worst activity which face that much down fall' and 'grow more than the any other'. Spelling errors are also present, such as 'begeing', 'n8umbers', and 'deacades'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with a high degree of inaccuracy, and the frequent repetition of basic terms restricts the lexical range to a Band 5.0 level, where vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic information but causes noticeable strain for the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The film club have', 'the participants was'), tense consistency, and article usage. Punctuation is particularly problematic, featuring numerous misplaced commas, lack of capitalisation at sentence beginnings, and run-on sentences. Complex structures are often faulty and cause difficulty for the reader. Because errors are frequent throughout the response and impede smooth reading, this performance meets the criteria for Band 5.0.

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