Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The multiline graph depicts the number of perticipants enroll for differnt activities at social hub in melbaourne, Australia for 20 years period between 2000 to 2020.
overall, there several activities some were around 5 which includes, film club, martial arts, amatur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. There are notable chance in participants of people in some show like amateure dramatics and table tennis although there are some club which have same responce by audience like film club and martial art. Film club have highest participants with very less fluctuation.
Furthermore, film is leading culb with more than 70 enrollments and had less deflection over 20 years. activities as martial arts had involments some were around 35 with small fluctuation but some event such as amateur dramaticas , table tennis and musical performances had very vivid responce. Firstly, event like amateurs dramastics had less participances in approximately around 25 and further rise to 30 in 2005 but for next 15 years it continue deeping. Secondly, Musical performances was only activities which have no audience in starting years 2000 and 2005 it started growing in 2010 with 10 enrollments and continue raising. finally, table tennis was club less participate initially around 15 but from 2010 it as surge to 55 participants
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by describing the overall trends and some specific details of the line graph. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation. For example, the student states that the film club reached 'more than 70 enrollments', whereas the graph peaks around 66. Similarly, the initial figure for amateur dramatics is misread as 'approximately around 25' (it was 26, which is acceptable), but the description of other data points contains vague generalisations and misreadings. An overview is attempted at the beginning, but it is confused and contains grammatical impediments. Consequently, the response achieves a Band 5.0 as it addresses the task only partially and contains noticeable factual inaccuracies regarding the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, which helps establish a basic structure. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by poor transitions and confusing sequencing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Furthermore', 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'finally', but the internal connections between sentences often fail to make logical sense. Reference words are sometimes unclear, and the overall flow is choppy, forcing the reader to struggle to follow the relationships between ideas. This level of organisation aligns best with a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary range is limited and repeatedly flawed by spelling errors and incorrect word choices. Examples include 'perticipants' instead of participants, 'differnt', 'melbaourne', 'amatur', 'chance' instead of changes, 'culb', 'deflection', 'deeping' (dipping), and 'surges' written as 'as surge'. While the student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary (e.g., 'enrollments', 'fluctuation'), the high frequency of spelling mistakes and lexical inaccuracies noticeably restricts precision and can cause difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but these are frequently marred by basic grammatical errors. Examples of structural issues include 'The multiline graph depicts the number of perticipants enroll for differnt activities...' and 'activities as martial arts had involments some were around 35 with small fluctuation'. Subject-verb agreement errors, incorrect verb forms ('continue deeping', 'continue raising'), and missing articles are frequent. Although the meaning can sometimes be deciphered, the high density of grammatical errors places this response at Band 5.0.
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