Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph illustrates information on the number of participants in various activities at a single social centre in Melbourne, Australia; from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, a few trends can be noticed at a glance. First, the fil club has themost number of participants throughout the timeline. Second, the musical perfomance cub has no participants for the first five years.
From the start of the timeline, the film club has the most number of participants followed by the martial arts club. The table tennis and amateur dramatics has average number of students while the musical performance has no participants.
Towards the middle, the film club show a slight downwards with 6 people before it regained it's momentum. On the othe rhand, the martial arts club shows a contant linear zig-zag path between 30 to 40 participating individuals, while the lines for table tennis and amateur dramatics show an interesting strucure.These two startoff in an upward motion but merged towards the middle of the timelime then the number of people in table tennis fell staright in a downwards motion while the amateur dramatics shot upwards crosing the martial arts graph reaching 50 individuals.
The musical performance club had no participants until 2005, after that the number of participants increased steadily.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by identifying main features and making relevant comparisons across the given period. The overview correctly highlights key trends, such as the film club having the highest participation and the musical performance club starting with zero participants. However, there are several factual inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data in the body paragraphs; for instance, the student states that table tennis and amateur dramatics merged in the middle and that amateur dramatics shot upwards to 50 individuals, whereas the chart shows amateur dramatics dropping significantly to 6 participants while table tennis rose to 54. These significant data misreadings prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an overall structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, paragraphing is somewhat fragmented, with several very short paragraphs. Cohesive devices are used, but sometimes mechanically or awkwardly, such as 'Towards the middle' and 'On the othe rhand'. The logical progression is also hindered by the factual misinterpretations of the chart data, making some comparisons confusing or difficult to follow for the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'momentum' and 'participants'. However, there are numerous spelling and lexical errors throughout the text, including typos like 'fil club', 'themost', 'perfomance', 'cub', 'contant', 'strucure', and 'crosing'. Word choice and phrasing are sometimes unnatural or inaccurate, such as 'fell staright in a downwards motion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The table tennis and amateur dramatics has'), missing articles, and punctuation/possessive errors like 'it's momentum' instead of 'its'. Additionally, typographical errors like spaces in words ('othe rhand') detract from the overall accuracy of the writing.
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