Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph demonstrates the number of participants for five different activities: fine club, marital art, armature dramatics, table tennis, musical performances at centre in Melbourn, Australia for the period between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, Fine club had the highest number of participants through out of the period. In contrast, marital club fluctuated over the period, while amateur dramatics dramatically decreased to end of the period. In addition, table tennis rose to mid of the year.
The figure for fine club stood at approximately 65 in 2000 and by the end of the period showed the highest number of participants by nearly 68 in 2020. While marital art fluctuated over the period between 2000 and 2020. Moreover, marital art recorded the approximately 39 in 2010 and after end of the period decrease from 39 to 32 in 2015.
The figure for amateur dramatics stood at roughly at 25 in 2000, From 2005 to 2020, the figure dramatically declined nearly 5 in by the end of the period. In contrast table tennis showed the second highest number of participants in 2020 at approximately 63. Table tennis rose from 19 to 55 between 2010 and 2020. The figure for musical performances stood at 0 and increased from o to 15 between 2005 and 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, including an overview and some specific data points. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that table tennis reached approximately 63 in 2020, whereas the graph shows it at around 54. Similarly, musical performances are described as starting at 0 and increasing to 15, while the data actually shows them starting at 0 and reaching 18 by 2020. The overview is also rather simplistic and contains inaccurate statements, such as claiming that table tennis 'rose to mid of the year'. While all five activities are mentioned, the frequent factual inaccuracies in reading the graph limit the task achievement score to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into four paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. This shows an attempt at logical organisation. However, the progression of ideas is sometimes confused by faulty cohesive devices and referencing errors. For example, 'In contrast, marital club fluctuated over the period' uses an inappropriate contrast marker, and the pronoun reference is unclear. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical flow within paragraphs is disjointed due to abrupt transitions and incomplete comparative statements. Cohesive devices are mechanically used and sometimes inaccurate, placing this response at Band 5.0 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to a data description task, using words like 'demonstrates', 'fluctuated', and 'dramatically decreased'. However, there are numerous severe spelling errors and lexical inaccuracies, such as 'fine club' (instead of film club), 'marital art' / 'marital club' (instead of martial arts), 'armature dramatics' (instead of amateur dramatics), and 'Melbourn' (Melbourne). These errors reflect a lack of proofreading and occasionally impede communication. Less common vocabulary is attempted but frequently misused or misspelled. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors for Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'While marital art fluctuated over the period between 2000 and 2020' and 'Table tennis rose from 19 to 55 between 2010 and 2020'. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors including incomplete sentence structures (e.g., hanging dependent clauses), preposition errors ('through out of the period'), and tense inconsistencies. Articles are also frequently misused or omitted. Although simple sentences are generally understandable, complex structures are often faulty and cause some difficulty for the reader, justifying a Band 5.0.
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