Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrets the numbers of participants for five different activities at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the time period 2000 to 2020.
Commeting the activiteis in 2002, the highest number of participants in Film club approximately at 65%. While, the participants stendy decline in 2010 at 60%. Meanwhile, it was rise same number as starting year of the participants in end of the year. In addition, Martial art was accounted as around 36% in 2000. It was flctuated in 2010; end of the year it was accounted same number of participants. Moreover, the strarting year of members reported in Amateur dramatics around 25%. Their ratio contiounsly fall in 2010 around 20%; it was persistent drop in end of the year 5%.
Furthermore, the Table tennis players participant around 15% in 2002. While, in 2010 theratio of players was slighly rise in 2010 at 20%. Meanwhile, the ratio clime in end of the year approximately above 50%. Moreover, the musical performance was not popular in 2002 and 2005; afterthat, people participate in 2010 around 10% only, the upturn in end of the year as 15%.
Overall, the highest competitors in film club. While, the lowest number of attendees in musical performances at social center in Melboure, Australia for the end of year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all major features of the line graph, including trends for the five activities over the period from 2000 to 2020. An overview is present at the end, identifying the highest and lowest categories. However, there are numerous inaccuracies in reporting specific data points (for instance, citing percentages instead of numbers of participants, and misstating the starting year as 2002 instead of 2000). While the overall trends for Film Club, Table Tennis, and Musical Performances are generally captured, the execution contains noticeable flaws in data precision and over-reliance on inaccurate numerical scaling. This places the response in the Band 5.0 range.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, body paragraphs for the categories, and a concluding overview. However, logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, repetitive sentence structures, and mechanical cohesive devices like 'Meanwhile' and 'Moreover'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall flow lacks the smooth progression expected at higher bands. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is faulty. This aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent attempts at less common items resulting in inaccurate word choice and unnatural collocations (e.g., 'illustrets', 'Commeting the activiteis', 'stendy decline', 'clime', 'competitors' instead of 'participants'). Spelling errors are noticeable throughout the text (e.g., 'illustrets', 'stendy', 'flctuated', 'strarting', 'contiounsly', 'slighly', 'Melboure'). The range is limited and frequently strains comprehension. This warrants a Band 5.0 score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but these are frequently marred by frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'the highest number of participants in Film club approximately at 65%', 'the starting year of members reported in Amateur dramatics around 25%'). Punctuation and verb tense usage are inconsistent, with frequent slips in basic agreement and prepositional use. These persistent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 profile.
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