Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line chart represents the number of peoples that took part in film club, martials arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances over period of two years, 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club was the most popular choice among all with highest participants. In contrast, the amateur dramatics has seen the most significant decline, with attracting least number of participants by the end of the period.
In the beginning, film club ranked first with highest number of participants, between 60 to 70 persons and showed the most consistent growth throughout the period (2000 to 2020), reaching upto 70 participants. On the other hand, table tennis attracted between 10 and 20 participants which increased gradually to 20 persons before reaching the peak of about 60 persons approx.
Similarly the amateur dramatics recorded the moderate number of participants upto 30 and experienced a slight increase before declining dramtically to below 10 participants by the end, 2020. While the trend of musical performances started at 2005 and increased to above 10 and then reached to a sta
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all the main features of the chart and makes relevant comparisons across the five activities. The overview captures the overall trends correctly, noting the popularity of the film club and the dramatic decline in amateur dramatics. However, the student misreads the time frame in the introduction, stating it is "over period of two years, 2000 to 2020" (which is twenty years), and misinterprets the start of musical performances (the graph shows zero participants in 2000 and 2005, whereas the text suggests they started in 2005). Furthermore, the response is incomplete, cutting off abruptly at the end ("and then reached to a sta"). This prevents full development of the final data point, restricting the score to Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as "In contrast", "On the other hand", and "Similarly" are used to link ideas. However, paragraphing is disrupted by the incomplete ending, and referencing is occasionally unclear or repetitive. Progression is evident between the general overview and specific details, but the mechanical nature of some transitions and the abrupt cut-off limit the overall coherence to a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common collocations and vocabulary items such as "significant decline", "consistent growth", and "gradually increased". However, there are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as "number of peoples" (instead of people), "martials arts" (instead of martial arts), and spelling errors like "dramtically". These errors do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The essay attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses and comparative forms. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings throughout, such as "with highest participants" (instead of with the highest number of participants), "reaching upto" (spacing issue), and missing articles ("the film club", "table tennis"). Additionally, the sentence structure breaks down completely at the end due to the incomplete sentence. Control of grammar is inconsistent, placing this response firmly at Band 5.5.
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