Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrartinng the number of participate for different activites at on social centre in Melbourne in Australia in the period between in 2000 and 2020 across five different centres.
Overall, flim club show the highest number of participant over the two dacades. While Musical performances shwoing least participate in starting period of time afterwards it show increments in number of participant. In addition, Amateur dramatics end up with lowest number of pariticapt over after dramatic fall in participants.
From the beginning of the time Flim club shows the 64 people participant in 2000.Afterwards, in 2010 it show slightly fall at 60 participants. In contrast of that , in 2020 it show the rose at around 65 in 2020 after falling in 2010. Whereas , Martial arts shows the flucatutation over the period, in 2000 it shows the 37 individual participant. However , it fall in 2005 at 2005. In contrast over the last five year it show slightly show the increament with the 39 people in 2010. Then it end up with the same level as starting 37 participate.
In 2000, Amateur had the 27 particiapant it grow in 2005 with the 39 people . After that it shows the dramatic fall over the last dacades.It ended up with the 5 paritcipant. In contrast, Table tennis started with only 18 participants.Between 2005 and 2010 it show steadily rose at the 19 and 20 participate respectivily. After that it show sharpe rose over the last decades around 65 participate.While, Musical performance started with the 0 particiapate in 2000, After 2005 it show increament over the period around 16 particiapate in 2020.QA
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all the main features of the chart and attempts to make comparisons between the categories over the 2000 to 2020 period. An overview is provided, noting the highest participation category (Film club) and trends for others. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting specific data points (e.g., stating Martial arts started at 37 when it was 36, and reporting mixed figures for Amateur dramatics). Additionally, some phrasing regarding the trends is imprecise. Nevertheless, the main shape of the graph and overarching trends are captured, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction, followed by an overview and body paragraphs detailing specific data. However, logical progression within and between sentences is frequently disrupted by mechanical or faulty cohesion, such as repetitive use of transitional phrases ('In contrast of that', 'Whereas', 'Then'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing structure could be more logically partitioned by grouping similar trends together rather than jumping between disparate activities. Overall coherence is maintained at a basic level, aligning with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate to communicate basic information about the graph, with attempts at less common items such as 'increments', 'fluctuation', and 'dramatic fall'. However, there are numerous word choice errors and incorrect word forms throughout the text, such as 'illustrartinng', 'participate' instead of 'participants', 'flim club', and 'sharpe rose'. These lexical errors and frequent spelling mistakes occasionally cause strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'it show slightly fall', 'over the last dacades.It ended up', 'started with only 18 participants.Between'). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also handled inconsistently (such as the trailing 'QA' at the end of the text). While meaning can generally be parsed, the high frequency of grammatical errors means it does not fully achieve Band 5.0, though it demonstrates control of basic structures.
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