Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of participants for multiple activites at one social centre in Austrilia from between 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the number of participants in table tennis and musical performance increased steadily, while film club, martial art and a armature dramatics decreased dramatically over the period.

At the beginning, the table tennis increased steadily from about seventeen in 2000 to approximately 55 in 2020. there was no changed from 2000 to 2005, but the number of participants in musical performance increased steadily over one and half decades from zero in 2005 to approximately eighteen in 2020. There were fluctuated in martial arts over the two decades from approximately thirty seven to

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response is significantly under-length, containing only 114 words compared to the required 150-word minimum, which heavily restricts the development of the task. Furthermore, the overview contains notable inaccuracies regarding the trends: the student states that table tennis and musical performances increased steadily while film club, martial arts, and amateur dramatics decreased dramatically. In reality, film club remained quite stable (fluctuating between 60 and 66) and martial arts showed fluctuating numbers rather than a dramatic decrease. The body paragraph attempts to report figures for table tennis and musical performances, but the response cuts off mid-sentence, leading to an incomplete overview of the data. Consequently, Task Achievement is penalised for insufficient length and inaccurate trend reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates some basic organizational structure with an introductory sentence and an overall overview. However, due to the abrupt ending of the text, logical progression is severely disrupted. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic ('Overall', 'At the beginning'). Paragraphing is also problematic, as the text consists of a series of short, disjointed blocks rather than fully formed paragraphs. The lack of a conclusion and the incomplete sentences impede the overall flow and logical development of ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'steadily', 'approximately', and 'decreased dramatically'. However, there are multiple spelling and lexical errors, including 'activites' (activities), 'Austrilia' (Australia), 'armature' (amateur), and 'there was no changed' (change). Additionally, the phrase 'from between' in the opening sentence is grammatically awkward. The vocabulary range is adequate to convey basic ideas about the chart, but errors in word formation and spelling reduce precision and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the concessive structure in the overview ('while film club... decreased'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak. Errors include tense and form issues ('the table tennis increased', 'There were fluctuated'), missing articles or pluralisation errors, and sentence fragments. Because the text ends mid-sentence ('from approximately thirty seven to'), the grammatical range is limited and control is inconsistent, though basic communicative intent is generally clear where complete clauses exist.

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