Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
In the period 2000 to 2020, the number of participants from film club was very high since they visited the socila centre in Melbourne, Australia from 65 to almost 68 person from year 2000 to 2020. The participant of musical performances were very low since no one from them visited the social centre from year 2000 to 2005 and after that in 2005 to 2010, it only increases in the range of 5 to 10 person. The number of Amateur dramatics participants decreased from 25 to 20 within the period of 2005 to 2010 and from 2010 to 2015 the graph went down from 20 to almost 12 participant. The number of participants from martial arts group remained constant from 2000 to 2020 and table tennis participants increased from 2010 to 2020 within the range of 20 to 55 person,
In conclusion, film participants were at all time high and constant while musical performance participants were at all time low. The participants from martial arts were constant and no quick change found in the number of those participants while table tennis participants
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to cover several main features of the graph, such as the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data interpretation, such as stating the film club numbers ranged from '65 to almost 68' (actual start was 64) and misreading the scale for amateur dramatics. Furthermore, the response is abruptly cut off at the end, leaving the final comparison incomplete and failing to fully develop an overview. While the basic trends are partially touched upon, the lack of precision and incomplete conclusion prevent the response from achieving a higher band. This corresponds to Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into two brief paragraphs, but the second paragraph trails off mid-sentence ('while table tennis participants...'). Logical progression is weak; sentences are strung together sequentially without clear structural signposts or effective grouping of related data. While cohesive devices like 'In conclusion' and 'after that' are used, referencing is sometimes unclear, and the overall arrangement lacks a cohesive overview structure. Paragraphing is inadequate given the abrupt ending. These features reflect Band 5 performance descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally repetitive and basic, relying heavily on simple terms like 'number of participants', 'very high', 'very low', and 'increased'. There are noticeable lexical errors, such as 'socila' (social) and incorrect singular/plural pairings like 'from 65 to almost 68 person' instead of 'persons' or 'participants'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are very limited, and word choice inaccuracies cause some minor confusion. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, fitting Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, mostly relying on simple or repetitive compound sentences with frequent conjunctions ('since', 'and'). Grammatical accuracy is inconsistent; there are multiple errors such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The participant of musical performances were') and prepositional errors. Furthermore, punctuation and sentence completeness are severely compromised by the incomplete final sentence. Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader, placing the grammar at Band 5.
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