Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph chart below represent data about the number of people involved in diverse activities at one social centre in melbourne
Australia between 2000 and 2020.
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Overall, the graph show a huge proportion of participants interseted in activities like Film club followed by matirail arts and others such as table tennis on the third range, amateur dramatics and musical performences .
Film club is the most activity contains a significant number of participant, which genrally fluctuate from 2000 to 2020 gap, it remain stable from 2000 to 2005 accounted by approximately 60 members in 2005 then increased dramaticaly between 2010 and 2020 to reach approximately 66 mumbers in 2020.
Martial arts begun by just 46 participant in 2000 and decline in 2005 to 30 members then has recovered to reach more than 46
particpant in 2010 .
Amateur daramatic is the only activity has a big fall between 2005 and 2020 has clearly decrased from approximately 30 participant to fall down less than 10
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the graph, including an overview and data points for several activities such as the Film club, Martial arts, and Amateur dramatics. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the specific data from the chart. For example, the student states that Martial arts 'begun by just 46 participant in 2000', whereas the actual figure in 2000 was 36. Additionally, some descriptions of trends are vague or misinterpret the visual data. While an overview is present, the development of ideas is limited by these factual inaccuracies in data extraction, placing the response at a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps give it a structured appearance, but the overall organisation lacks a clear logical progression. The introduction contains formatting and punctuation issues, and the second paragraph serves as a somewhat disjointed overview. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inappropriately, such as 'then has recovered' or 'is the only activity has a big fall'. Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing between sentences is occasionally confusing, leading to a choppy flow. This performance aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for conveying basic information about trends, employing words like 'stable', 'increased', and 'decline'. However, there are numerous spelling mistakes ('melbourne', 'interseted', 'matirail', 'performences', 'daramatic', 'decrased') and awkward word choices ('third range', 'most activity contains'). The range of vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, and the frequency of lexical errors causes some distraction for the reader, fitting a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex sentences contain grammatical errors or awkward phrasing (e.g., 'The graph chart below represent data...', 'Amateur daramatic is the only activity has a big fall between 2005 and 2020 has clearly decrased...'). Subject-verb agreement errors, missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns ('melbourne'), and tense inconsistencies are frequent. Although the meaning can usually be understood, the high frequency of structural errors keeps the score at Band 5.0.
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