Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates data about individuals take part in five activities conducted at social centre in Melbourne, Australia during the year 2000 to 2020.
Overall, participation is maximum in film club by the participant . Whereas, it is least in case of musical performance.
In film club, number of participation from the year 2000 to 2010 follow downward trend but after 2010 number of participant increase till 2020. At the beginning material arts has 36 number of participant and it follow zig-zag trend till 2020.
Their is huge change in table tennis which is nearby 17 at starting but after 2010 it increase till 2020 which approximately 52 and amateur dramatics was 26 participant in 2000 and rise to 29 in 2005 after that number of participant were fall till 2020 which is 19, 12 and 5 during 2010,2015,2020 respectively .musical performances starts at year 2005 and rise till 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the five activities over the twenty-year period. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data compared to the visual source. For instance, the student states that amateur dramatics was 19, 12, and 5 during 2010, 2015, and 2020 respectively, whereas the graph shows approximately 20, 14, and 6. Furthermore, musical performances started in 2010, not 2005. The overview is also very brief and lacks clarity regarding overall trends. Because of these inaccuracies and the limited selection of supported details, the response falls into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response attempts a basic structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the progression is weak due to poor paragraphing and a lack of clear overall logical development. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate (such as 'Whereas, it is least in case of' and 'Their is huge change'), leading to a disjointed reading experience. The referencing between sentences is often unclear, resulting in a somewhat mechanical structure. This corresponds to a Band 5 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word choice errors (e.g., 'individuals take part' instead of 'individuals taking part', 'material arts' instead of 'martial arts', and 'nearby 17' instead of 'around 17'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'downward trend' and 'zig-zag trend', but the range is limited and noticeable errors cause some difficulty for the reader. These features align closely with Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex forms are consistently flawed (e.g., 'number of participation from the year 2000 to 2010 follow downward trend'). There are numerous grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('number of participant increase') and incorrect prepositions ('at starting' instead of 'at the start'). Punctuation and spelling errors also appear frequently. This performance is characteristic of a Band 4 or low Band 5, comfortably earning a Band 4.5.
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