Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given graph shows how many participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne and Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
In general, it can be clearly seen that film club activity has highest number of participants and amateur dramatics has lowest participants in last years.
Looking at the graph in more detail, it can be experienced that people participate highestly in film club around 64 and participants were almost similar from 2000 to 2020. It was a slight decrease in 2010 to 60 participants. Participants take part in martial art to 36 participants in 2000 and it was flucuated all over the years. Moreover, amateur dramatics activity das participants around 26 in 2000 and it has a slight decrease by 28. After that, it was continuously decrease in this activity.
Moving to the next activity, participants take part in table tennis by 17 participants and it was continuously increased. In 2020 participants reached to 54 participants. Musical performances has no participants in 2000 to 2005. It was increased from 2005 and it was experienced a continuous increase in participants by 17 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all the main activities in the chart and provides an overview in the second paragraph, identifying the film club as the highest and amateur dramatics as the lowest in the later years. Key data points are reported, such as the film club starting at around 64 and table tennis rising to 54 in 2020. However, some trends are described inaccurately or awkwardly, such as stating that amateur dramatics had 'a slight decrease by 28' in 2005 (when it actually rose slightly before falling) and minor confusions with numbers. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, but more precise reporting of data and clearer comparisons would improve the score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay is organized into four paragraphs, including an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for different activities, which provides a logical structure. However, progression is sometimes hindered by awkward transitions and mechanical cohesive devices like 'Moving to the next activity'. Referencing can also be unclear, and some sentences feel disjointed. Paragraphing is present and generally appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response, but the internal cohesion requires smoother connections to achieve a higher band.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, but lacks precision and flexibility. The student relies on basic terms and repeats words like 'participants' and 'activity' frequently throughout the text. There are also noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'participate highestly' and 'das participants'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success. While communication is not severely impeded, the narrow range and frequent word-choice inaccuracies keep the lexical score at band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but many complex structures are faulty or unnatural, such as 'it can be experienced that people participate highestly'. There are frequent grammatical errors, including tense inconsistencies, missing prepositions, and verb form mistakes (e.g., 'it was flucuated', 'it was continuously decrease'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but grammatical inaccuracy is noticeable throughout and occasionally causes minor strain for the reader.
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