Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
amateur dramatic
musical performance
table tennis
martial art
film club
The line graph illustrates present of Melbourne people in different distinct social activities from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, martial art and film club particepant fluctuated, but remain same. However in first some oscillation, after that it steady increase in musical performance and table tennis, in opposite amateur dramatic decrease in the total period.
Firstely for musical performance, the figure remain steady in between 2000 and 2005 but
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum requirement, containing only 77 words, and trails off mid-sentence. Consequently, it only partially addresses the task. While there is a brief attempt at an overview mentioning that martial arts and film club participants fluctuated while table tennis and musical performances increased, key details are missing and data is not reported accurately or thoroughly. Due to the severe under-length penalty and incomplete nature of the response, it fits into Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text begins with a disjointed bulleted list rather than a proper introduction. While some basic cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'Overall' and 'However', the logical progression is disrupted by the abrupt ending of the text mid-sentence ('...but'). Paragraphing is poorly handled with fragmented thoughts and isolated clauses. Overall arrangement lacks cohesion and control, which aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with several spelling and lexical errors such as 'particepant' for participants, 'present' instead of presence or participation, and 'amateur dramatic' instead of dramatics. There is little control over word formation or collocation, causing the reader some difficulty. This performance reflects the criteria for Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are very limited and frequently faulty. Examples include 'martial art and film club particepant fluctuated, but remain same' and 'in first some oscillation, after that it steady increase'. There are persistent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and word class. Because the text breaks off prematurely, complex structures are missing and errors are frequent, warranting a Band 4.0.
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