Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph below shows information on the number of participants across differebt activities at one social center in melbourne, Austrilian for the period of [redacted phone]

in 2000 they was a minimal decrease in film club marital art declined to 35 there was a slight increase in Amateur dramatics to25 table tennis has the lowest number across all while musical performance was not recorded

in 2005 there was a slight increase in musical performance, following table tennis , Amateur dramatics declined hugely, there was a slight increase in marital arts while film club remained the highest with a little decrease

in 2010 all the countries remained stable in 2015 there was a slight increase across all

in 2020 Amateur declined signicantly while marital art , film club and musical performance remained incresed

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping at only 132 words, which severely impacts the development of the task. Furthermore, the selection and reporting of main features is extremely chaotic and inaccurate. The student misinterprets several trends and years, such as stating that 'in 2010 all the countries remained stable' (referring to activities rather than countries). The overview is missing, and the data points are vague or incorrect, such as claiming musical performance was not recorded in 2000 when the graph shows zero. These significant omissions and inaccuracies place the response at Band 4.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised in this response. The text is broken into erratic, fragmented paragraphs that lack logical structure and clear progression. While the student attempts to use temporal markers like 'in 2000' and 'in 2005', the organization fails to guide the reader effectively through the data. Referencing is weak, with bizarre phrasing such as 'all the countries remained stable' where 'countries' is incorrectly used for activities. Overall, the structural arrangement and mechanical cohesive devices are inadequate, justifying a band score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The lexical resource is basic and heavily restricted. The student demonstrates limited control over vocabulary, with noticeable spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'differebt', 'melbourne', 'Austrilian', 'marital' instead of 'martial', and 'signicantly'. Word choice is frequently inappropriate, such as referring to activities as 'countries'. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for a precise summary of a graphical dataset, leading to a score of 4.0 according to the official descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

Grammatical range and accuracy are very limited. The response consists mostly of fragmented or run-on simple sentences with severe punctuation errors, such as missing capital letters and periods (e.g., 'to25 table tennis'). There are fundamental structural errors, such as 'they was a minimal decrease', which demonstrates a lack of basic subject-verb agreement. Complex structures are absent, and frequent grammatical errors cause strain for the reader, placing this performance firmly at Band 4.0.

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