Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

amateur dramatic

musical performance

table tennis

martial art

film club

The line graph illustrates presents of Melbourne people in different five distinct social activities, over a twenty-year period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, martial art and film club participants fluctuated, but remain same. However in first some oscillation in the figure, after that it experienced dramatic growth in musical performance and table tennis. Conversely, amateur dramatic was the only witnessed a significant downward trend

Looking at the details the figure of film club fluctuated slightly but remained starting at roughly 64 participent in 2000 and ending at peah of nearly 66 in 2020.Table tennis started at one of the least popular activity with only about 16 participants, but it experienced a sharp increase after 2010 and to reach 54 at the end of the period. Musical performance did not excited for thr first five years but rose steadily after 2005 and reaching just under the 20 participent by 2020.

In stark contrast, the number of people doing martial art remained relatively stable, hovering around 30 participants over the two decades destipe minor fluctuations. Meanwhile amateur dramatic show a initial margin rise to about 28 participants in 2005, but subsequently plunged over the next 15 years, dropping to a low of roughly 7 participants by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons of the given line graph over the twenty-year period. An appropriate overview is provided, capturing the overall trends such as the stability of the film club and martial arts, the dramatic growth in musical performances and table tennis, and the downward trend in amateur dramatics. Key data points are accurately cited from the visual data, such as the peak of the film club at nearly 66 in 2020 and the rise of table tennis to 54. The ideas are relevant and well supported with data. Minor inaccuracies in reading specific figures do not detract from the overall clear reporting, meeting the criteria for a solid band 7.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression from introduction to overview, followed by detailed body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related categories. Cohesive devices are employed to connect ideas, such as "Overall," "Looking at the details," and "In stark contrast." However, some cohesive links and transitional phrases are awkward or mechanically used, such as "However in first some oscillation in the figure," which disrupts the natural flow. Referencing is mostly clear, but occasional clunky transitions prevent the essay from achieving a higher band score.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as "fluctuated," "dramatic growth," "downward trend," and "plunged." However, there are noticeable word choice and spelling errors throughout the response, such as "illustrates presents" instead of "presents information," "participent" instead of "participant," "peah" instead of "peak," and "destipe" instead of "despite." Additionally, some phrases are unidiomatic or grammatically awkward, such as "did not excited" instead of "did not exist." These lexical errors occasionally impede comprehension, placing the response firmly in the band 6.0 range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like subordinate clauses and comparative constructions. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and word formation, such as "martial art and film club participants fluctuated, but remain same" (tense mismatch), "amateur dramatic was the only witnessed" (faulty passive/active structure), and "amateur dramatic show a initial margin rise" (tense and adjective-noun form errors). While these errors do not completely obscure meaning, they occur regularly enough to prevent the writing from reaching a higher band level.

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