Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph demonstrates number of participants at one social centre for five different activities in Melbourne during 2000 to 2020. The activities are film club, martial arts, amature dramatics, table tennis and muscical performances. Through all these twenty years film cllub is the only activity attended by most of participants. On the other hand, muscial performance had the least performers.
In 2000, more than 15 people joined for table tennis and above of 25 performers attended amateur dramatics. By the year of 2010, both acitivities had 20 participant. Gradually the number of participants in reached to mre than 50 people by 2020, however noticeably the number of performers for amature dramatics lowered less than 10. Martial arts is the onlu acitivity that remained in a moderate pace.
Muscical performance steadily raised from zero participants in 2000 to almost 20 by the years of 2020. In contrast, film club always stayed at a steady number of 60 to 70 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task well by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. The introduction accurately states what the graph shows, and key trends are identified, such as the film club consistently having the highest participation and musical performances starting at zero. However, there are some imprecise descriptions of data, such as stating that table tennis and amateur dramatics both had 20 participants in 2010 (amateur dramatics was actually at 20, but table tennis was also around 20, which is accurate; however, saying 'more than 15 people joined for table tennis and above of 25 performers attended amateur dramatics' in 2000 is slightly imprecise compared to the exact gridline figures of 16 and 26). Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of Task Achievement adequately, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear division into three paragraphs: an introduction with general trends, a body paragraph discussing table tennis, amateur dramatics, and martial arts, and a final paragraph covering musical performances and the film club. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'On the other hand', 'In 2000', 'Gradually', and 'In contrast'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes mechanical, and there are awkward transitions between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas could be structured more logically. This corresponds to a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items related to data reporting such as 'participants', 'performers', 'activity', 'steadily raised', and 'steady number'. However, there are several spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'amature' instead of 'amateur', 'muscical' instead of 'musical', 'cllub' instead of 'club', 'in reached' instead of 'reached', and 'onlu' instead of 'only'. Additionally, the phrase 'raised' is used incorrectly where 'rose' is required. These lexical errors do not impede communication, placing the response at a Band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as introductory prepositional phrases ('In 2000, ...') and subordinate clauses ('however noticeably the number of performers for amature dramatics lowered less than 10'). There are noticeable grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'demonstrates number of participants' (missing article), 'the number of participants in reached to mre than' (incorrect preposition and spelling), 'lowered less than 10' (incorrect verb choice), and 'remain in a moderate pace'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but grammatical slips occur frequently. This performance aligns with a Band 5.5.
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