Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph below gives information regarding the number of people who took part in different tasks at a social center in Melbourne, Australia from year 2000 to 2020.
Popular = film club table tennis, martial art,
popularity of amateur decreasing and now ranks lower that mwith mjusicial performances, gaining popularity slowly and steadily
Overall, film club and martial arts have maintained a steady popularity among the people. Futhermore, a sharp shift in popularity is seen in the popularity of table tennis (increased dramatically), and amater dramatics (steep decline). Lastly, musicial performances, although later introduced, also showed gradual increase with the passing years.
In the period of twenty years, film club and martial arts have remained steady in terms of popularity, with film club having participants between 60 and 70, and martial art with people between 30 to 40. Futhermore, musical performances also shows a steady and gradual increase in these years, despite being introduced five years after the other activties.
Fuurthermore, a drastic change is seeen in the popularity of amateur dramatics and table tennis. From year, 2000 to 2005, amateur dramatics was increasing, but then after, we seena steep decline in its popularity, while table tennis participant increased, making it the
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response presents an overview of the main trends and attempts to report key features from the line graph, such as the stability of the film club and martial arts, alongside the contrasting trajectories of table tennis and amateur dramatics. However, the essay is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence ("making it the"). Furthermore, there are disjointed notes included near the beginning of the text, and some data points lack precision or full development. Because the response is unfinished and contains structural disorganization, it aligns best with Band 5.0 descriptors, where the task is addressed only partially and ideas are left underdeveloped.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response features an initial attempt at paragraphing, but it includes isolated, fragmented notes near the top that disrupt the logical flow. Cohesive devices are used in the body paragraphs (such as "Overall", "Futhermore", and "Lastly"), but referencing and paragraph structure break down significantly as the text proceeds. Additionally, the essay terminates abruptly, preventing any sense of logical conclusion. These organizational flaws and mechanical cohesion errors place the response firmly in the Band 5 range, characterized by some overall organisation but a lack of clear progression throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range to discuss trends, employing terms like "popularity", "dramatically", "steep decline", and "gradual increase". However, there are numerous spelling and typographical errors throughout the text, including "center" (centre), "Futhermore" (Furthermore), "amater" (amateur), "musicial" (musical), "activties" (activities), "Fuurthermore" (Furthermore), and "seeen" (seen). Furthermore, the inclusion of rough notes with truncated words limits the precision of vocabulary use. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptor where noticeable lexical errors are present.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as "film club and martial arts have remained steady in terms of popularity, with film club having participants between 60 and 70..." However, grammatical accuracy is compromised by recurring punctuation and phrasing issues, missing articles, and the incomplete final sentence. There are also typographical errors and tense inconsistencies in places. While simple sentences are generally understandable, the frequency of errors and the unfinished nature of the essay restrict the score to Band 5.0, reflecting limited control over complex forms and frequent errors.
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