Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants involved in five activities at one social centre organized in Melbourne, for the period of twenty years.
Overall, the greatest number of participants are equipped within film club, whereas the least number of people involved in musical performances. Besides this, amateur dramatics showed the considerable decline contrary to those playing table tennis especially after 2010. However, the number of participants kept fluctuating, as far as martial arts is concerned.
In 2000, approximately 64% participants are reported to be in film club, then decreasing to 60% in 2010 and then rose gradually to 66% in next ten years. Whereas, no one chose musical performance until 2005, before growing progressively till 2020, with 15 participants opted for it by then. However, martial arts shown considerable variations throughout, starting from 35 participants in 2000, then dropping to 30 in 2005 following this the figure peaked at 37 participants in 2010, falling slightly again to 33% in 2015 and then rose a little bit to 345 in 2020.
Moreover, the number of people enrolled in amateur dramatics and table tennis increased progressively starting from 27 and 15 in 2000 , respectively. This rose to 29 for amateur dramatics and 18 for table tennis in 2005. From both followed opposite trend that is the number of participants involved in amateur dramatics decreased substantially until 2020 to 5 whereas, after surpassing it in 2010 the number of participants playing table tennis increased significantly to 51 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. The overview accurately captures the highest participation (film club) and lowest participation (musical performances), alongside the contrasting trends of amateur dramatics and table tennis. Data points are generally cited correctly from the chart, although there are minor inaccuracies in exact figures (for instance, stating 64% instead of 64 participants, and minor discrepancies in specific yearly values like '345' instead of 35 or 34). Despite these minor misreadings of units and figures, the overall selection and reporting of trends satisfy the Band 6.5 to 7.0 descriptors well.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introductory paragraph, followed by a clear overview paragraph, and then detailed body paragraphs breaking down the data chronologically and categorically. Paragraphing is used appropriately. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or slightly faulty, such as the awkward transition 'From both followed opposite trend' in the final paragraph. Referencing is generally clear, though occasional clumsy linking devices prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. Overall, the logical sequence is maintained throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'fluctuating', 'progressively', 'surpassing', and 'substantially'. However, there are noticeable inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'participants are equipped within film club', 'the greatest number of participants are reported', and using percentage signs (%) instead of absolute numbers of participants. Spelling is generally accurate, but awkward phrasing prevents the lexical score from reaching a higher level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing subordinating clauses and varied temporal markers. There are, however, several grammatical errors and awkward structures throughout the response, such as 'whereas the least number of people involved in musical performances' (missing verb), 'martial arts shown considerable variations' (tense/form error), and 'then rose a little bit to 345 in 2020' (typographical/accuracy error). While these errors do not impede overall communication, they occur frequently enough to place the essay firmly in the band 6 category.
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