Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph chart below shows data about the number of participants for diverse activities at social centre in Melbourne Australia between the mentioned period [redacted phone].

Overall, the graph represent three important events which is clearly noticed that the film club is the most activity contains a huge number of participants, table tennis has made a breakthrough while amateur dramatics activity had remarcable fall.

Film club activity has a big proportion of participants throughout the period with significantly more than 65 participants, it has a light fall in 2010 but generally remains stable.

Martial arts has fluctuated from 200 to 2020, it started by approximately 36 involvers then has decreased in 2005 to 30 personne. however, it has recovered in 2010 to reach more than 36 and has reduced again in 2015 to approximatelly 31.

Amateur dramatics was the only activity which has considered a big decline between 2005 and 2020 the number of participants reduced from 28 to fewer than 10 participants.

Table tennis has significantly made an important jump in the interval 2010 to 2020 to reach 50 participants after it started just with 15.

Musical performances has increased dramatically even though its raise begun from 2005 that means there was not any participant from 2000 to late 2004.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response covers all the main trends shown in the line graph, including the dominant position of the film club, the breakthrough in table tennis, and the notable decline in amateur dramatics. The candidate successfully identifies overview trends and provides specific figures for different years, such as the rise in table tennis from 15 to 50 and the drop in amateur dramatics. However, there are minor inaccuracies in data reporting (for instance, stating that martial arts fluctuated from 200 to 2020 instead of 2000, and slight misreadings of the exact figures). Despite these minor flaws, the task is addressed well, aligning closely with Band 6.5 to 7.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview paragraph, and subsequent body paragraphs dedicated to individual activities. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'however', and 'even though' are used to structure the information, although referencing and transitions can occasionally feel a bit mechanical ('Martial arts has fluctuated...', 'Amateur dramatics was...'). Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate each trend, ensuring an overall coherent arrangement that allows the reader to follow the progression easily.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts at less common lexical items such as 'breakthrough', 'remarcable fall' (spelled 'remarcable'), 'proportion', and 'fluctuated'. However, there are several lexical errors and inappropriate word choices, such as 'involvers' instead of 'participants', 'personne' instead of 'personnel' or 'people', and spelling mistakes ('remarcable', 'approximatelly'). The range is sufficient to convey the main features of the chart, but errors in word formation and spelling prevent the response from achieving a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, including relative clauses and subordinate clauses (e.g., 'even though its raise begun from 2005 that means there was not any participant...'). There are, however, frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the film club is the most activity contains'), tense inconsistencies ('has considered a big decline'), and run-on sentences or comma splices. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to restrict the score to Band 6.0.

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