Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the data about the figures of participants for various activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it can clearly seen that the number of participants in both film club and Martial arts remained relatively stable throughout the period whereas, the remaining two categories fluctuated. In addition, Amateur dramatics followed the downward Patten
Looking at the stable categories Film club first stood at above 60 before reading almost 70 from 2000 to 2020. As for Martial arts In 2000 it stood at above 30 then increase slightly and reached to almost no in 2020.
Turning to Amateur dramatics it decrease sharply from almost 30 to 10 from 2005 to 2020 before remaining stable in 2000 at above 20. Regarding with the Table tennis it grew sharply between 2000 and 2020 at above 10 to reaching a peak of Just under 60.
Musical performances also before remaining stable in 2000. After that it grew upward reaching a peak of 20 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the graph, presenting an overview and mentioning several categories such as the film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, and table tennis. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies and misreadings of the data. For instance, the student states that martial arts reached 'almost no in 2020' when the graph shows it at around 36 participants. Similarly, the description of the film club ('first stood at above 60 before reading almost 70') and table tennis contains confused data points and phrasing. The overview is somewhat inaccurate, as not all remaining categories fluctuated in the way described. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a Band 5.5 score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic structural organization with an introduction and separate body paragraphs for different activities. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing phrasing and disjointed sentences, such as 'Musical performances also before remaining stable in 2000.' Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes misused (e.g., 'Regarding with'). Paragraphing is attempted, but sentences within paragraphs often lack clear thematic links, making the text occasionally difficult to follow. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5.0 range.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with several lexical errors and awkward word choices (e.g., 'Patten' instead of pattern, 'reading' instead of reaching, 'decrease sharply' used incorrectly for the timeline). There are also some spelling and word-formation errors. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary related to trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peak'), inaccuracies in collocation and word form limit the precision of the report. This performance corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but attempts at complex structures frequently contain grammatical errors or are incomplete (e.g., 'Musical performances also before remaining stable in 2000'). There are frequent errors in preposition usage, verb forms, and sentence boundaries (e.g., 'As for Martial arts In 2000 it stood at above 30 then increase slightly'). Punctuation is also weak, with missing commas and periods causing run-on ideas. Although the meaning can sometimes be deciphered, the frequency of errors places this at a Band 5.0.
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