Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph ilustrates the numbers of participants for different activities like film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances at one social center in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club remined the most papular activity throughout the period, but also show fluctuations in growth. Table tennis experienced a continous growth, while amateur dramatice declined significantly. Musical performances gradually increased after 2005.
In 2000,film club had approximatly highest number of participants its almost 66 in 2000. After some time it shows some changes, it declined to 61 in 2010. After that, the number of participants rose gradually and reached at 68 in 2020. The number of people taking part in martial arts fluctuated, starting at 39 participants and reaching 38 in 2010, than it declined to 34 in 2015 and slightly increased to 35 in 2020.
Table tennis showed a strong upward trend. Its participants increased from 16 in 2000 to 20 in 2005 and stable in 2010. After that, its number of participants rose sharply to 57 in 2020.
In contast, amateur dramatics followed a downward trend. After rising from 27 to 29 participants between 2000 to 2005, the number fell sharply to about 8 in 2020. Finally, musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005, but the figure increased to 13 in 2015 and 17 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. An appropriate overview is provided in the second paragraph, capturing the overall trends such as the film club remaining the most popular, table tennis growing, and amateur dramatics declining. Key data points are cited correctly, such as table tennis rising sharply to over 50 participants by 2020. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in citing exact initial data points for certain years compared to the source graph (e.g., stating film club started at 66 in 2000 when the graph shows around 64). Nevertheless, the response covers all required aspects and provides a well-rounded summary of the visual data, aligning well with the Band 7 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The essay is logically organised with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introduction and an overview paragraph, followed by well-structured body paragraphs discussing individual categories (film club, martial arts, table tennis, amateur dramatics, and musical performances). Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In 2000', 'After that', and 'In contrast' are used effectively to guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is used appropriately, with each category or grouping given sufficient focus. While referencing and linking are generally clear and functional, the transitions between sentences could sometimes be smoother to reach a higher band, placing this firmly at Band 7.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for an Academic Task 1 response, successfully employing terms like 'fluctuated', 'continous growth', 'declined significantly', and 'upward trend'. There are, however, several spelling errors ('ilustrates', 'remined', 'papular', 'continous', 'dramatice', 'contast') and occasional minor word-form or collocation issues ('reached at 68'). Despite these lexical slips, the vocabulary used is sufficient to convey the intended meaning and describe the graphical trends clearly. This performance meets the criteria for Band 6, where an adequate range is shown alongside noticeable spelling mistakes that do not impede overall communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms to report the data, such as 'While amateur dramatice declined significantly' and 'After rising from 27 to 29 participants between 2000 to 2005, the number fell sharply'. There are several grammatical and mechanical errors present, including preposition misuse ('reached at 68') and tense inconsistencies. However, these errors do not impede communication, and the core message remains clear throughout. The control of grammar aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor, featuring a combination of straightforward and more ambitious structures alongside recurring errors in punctuation and grammar.
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