Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie chart illustrates information about The the number of participants for different activities add social center Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period, while table tennis showed the most significant increase. In contrast, amateur dramatics experienced a considerable decline. Musical performances started with no participants but increased gradually over time.
In 2000, the film club had about 60 four participants, and this figure declined slightly to sixty in 2010 before rising to around sixty six in 2020. The number of people taking part in material art fluctuated During the period, moving between 32 and 38 participants and ending at approximately 36.
Regarding the other activities, amateur Dramatic increased marginally From 26th in 2028 in 2005, but then fall slightly to only six participants by 2020. Table tennis, on the other hand rose from 16 participants in 2000 to 20 in 2010 before, before increasing sharply to 54 in 2020 .Musical performance had no participants in 2000 and 2005 but the figure grew 212 in 2010 and 18 by the end of the period
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully identifies the visual aid as a line graph (despite incorrectly calling it a pie chart in the opening sentence) and covers all the main features and trends of the data. An overview is present, highlighting the film club's enduring popularity, the significant rise in table tennis, and the sharp decline in amateur dramatics. Key data points, such as the initial and final figures for various activities, are reported accurately. However, there are minor typos in the numbers (e.g., "60 four" instead of 64), but these do not obscure the overall reporting of information. The response satisfies the requirements well, though precision in data transcription could be slightly improved.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The text is logically organised into four paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing specific trends. Cohesive devices such as "Overall", "In contrast", and "Regarding the other activities" are used effectively to guide the reader through the data. Paragraphing is logical and appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. However, referencing and progression are occasionally hindered by typographical errors and awkward transitions, such as "before, before increasing sharply" and punctuation errors within sentences, which slightly disrupts the flow of reading.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, successfully using terms like "declined slightly", "fluctuated", "increased marginally", and "rose sharply". However, there are notable lexical and spelling errors that detract from the overall quality, such as writing "material art" instead of "martial arts", "fall" instead of "fell", and confusing numbers with letters ("212" instead of "to 12"). Despite these errors, the message remains understandable. To achieve a higher band, the student needs greater accuracy in word choice and spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, attempting time clauses and comparative phrases (e.g., "while table tennis showed the most significant increase"). However, control over grammar and mechanics is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical and mechanical errors, including incorrect capitalization ("The The"), preposition errors ("add social center Melbourne" instead of "at a social centre in Melbourne"), tense inconsistencies, and typographical errors like "26th in 2028 in 2005". These errors occasionally require the reader to re-read sections, placing this response firmly in the Band 6 territory for grammar and accuracy.
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