Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of people who participated for different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, between 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Film club and Table tennis were on highest number of people participated in activities, whereas Amateur dramatic consider lowest activity in which people participated. However, Marttial arts activity showed fluctuated over the peorid.
Looking first at the Film club activity started by around 65 number of people and finished by apprximately 67 number o who participated between 2000 to 2020. Moreover, Film club had 62 people participated in 2010. Table tennis were also dramatically rose from 2010 to 2020 where over the 18 number of people participated and 53 number of individuals participated respectively. However, Musical performances activity had stareted participation in 2010 with approximately 12 people and reached at 18 number f people by 2020.
Amateur dramatics had fell considerably over the period, in 2005, there were 29 individuals participated in this activity and gradually decalined by only 5 people participate in this activity by 2020. Martial arts activity remained stable with around 37 number of individuals participated.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart, identifying the Film club and Table tennis as significant categories, as well as tracking trends for Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, and Musical performances. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reading the data. For instance, the student states that the Film club 'started by around 65 number of people and finished by apprximately 67', and claims that Table tennis rose from 2010 to 2020 where 'over the 18 number of people participated and 53 number of individuals participated respectively' (the actual 2010 figure is around 20, rising to 54 in 2020). The overview is also somewhat awkwardly expressed ('Film club and Table tennis were on highest number of people participated'). While the key trends are broadly sketched, the data referencing lacks precision and contains several minor misreadings, pulling the task achievement score to Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into four paragraphs, following a logical layout with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dedicated to different activities. Cohesive devices and transition words are attempted, such as 'Overall', 'Looking first at', 'Moreover', and 'However'. However, referencing and cohesion are frequently awkward or faulty, as seen in phrases like 'Film club activity started by around 65 number of people and finished by apprximately 67 number o who participated'. Paragraphing is present, but the internal logical flow within sentences is often disrupted by poor syntactic linking and repetition of structural patterns. Cohesion is therefore mechanical rather than smooth, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'participated', 'people', and 'activity'. There are several word choice and collocation errors, such as 'Amateur dramatic consider lowest activity', 'Marttial arts activity showed fluctuated', and 'Musical performances activity had stareted participation'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'dramatically rose', 'considerably', and 'gradually declined', but these are often coupled with awkward phrasing or grammatical errors ('decalined by only 5 people participate'). Lexical range is limited and inadequate for precision, justifying a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the response, including subject-verb agreement issues ('Table tennis were also dramatically rose'), missing prepositions, incorrect verb forms ('Amateur dramatics had fell', 'activity had stareted'), and spelling errors ('Marttial', 'apprximately', 'stareted', 'decalined'). Punctuation is generally acceptable, but frequent errors in basic clause structures and word forms cause difficulty for the reader and impede fluent comprehension, placing the response firmly at Band 5.0.
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