Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided line graph represents the number of participants for five activities ( film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, musical performances) at a social centre of Melbourne city of Australia from 2000 to 2020, for a period of 20 years.
Overall, film club remained on top throughout the period, with some falls and rises, while there were least participants in musical performances but started to increase and surpassed amateur dramatics.
Number of contestants were highest in movie club above 60 in 2000 and decreased steadily and reached at 60 in 2010 followed by a gowth in next 10 years and remained nearly equal to numbers in 2000. Meanwhile, martial arts was second at 38 and showed fluctuations during the whole period and leveled off in 2020.
Participants were below 30 in dramatics in 2000 but experienced a sharp decline and least number of individuals in 2020, compared to table tennis players who were less than 20 in 2000 followed by a climb and hit 20 in 2010, then rose steadily and crossed 50 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting on the five activities across the given timeframe. A clear overview is provided, highlighting the film club as the most popular activity and noting the contrasting trend of musical performances. Key features and comparisons are generally well-selected, noting the steady nature of the film club, the fluctuations in martial arts, the steep decline in amateur dramatics, and the significant growth in table tennis. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating that the film club reached 60 in 2010 when it started at 64 and dipped slightly, but these do not detract from the overall adequacy of the response. The task is addressed satisfactorily, earning a Band 6.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized logically with a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs that group data by activities. Cohesive devices are used adequately to connect ideas, such as "Overall," "while," "Meanwhile," and "then." Paragraphing is generally appropriate, though the second and third body paragraphs could be structured slightly more distinctly. Referencing is mostly clear, though some transitions between sentences feel a bit mechanical. Overall arrangement is coherent and easy to follow, aligning well with the Band 6.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to trends and data reporting such as "steady decline," "fluctuations," "sharp decline," and "climb." However, there are some awkward word choices and collocation errors, such as "Number of contestants" instead of "Number of participants" and "gowth" (a typo for growth). Less common vocabulary is attempted with occasional inaccuracy, but meaning remains clear throughout. This performance fits the Band 6.0 descriptor profile well.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and coordinate structures. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "least participants in musical performances but started to increase" (missing subject) and "reached at 60" (unnecessary preposition). Punctuation is generally acceptable, and while errors are present, they rarely impede communication. The control of grammar corresponds to a solid Band 6.0 level.
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