Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This line graph illustrates the changes in the number of people participating in five different activities of a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, over a twenty-year period from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that film club was consistently the most popular activity throughout the entire period while table tennis experienced the most dramatic growth. Conversely, Ameateur dramatics was only activity that witnessed a significant, downward trend.

Looking at the details, film club attendance flactuated slightly but remained high, starting at the roughly 64 participants in 2000 and ending at the peak of nearly 66 in 2020. Table tannis started as one of the popular activities with only about 16 participants, but its numbers expereienced a sharp increase, climbing exponentiallyafter 2010 to reach 54 by the end of the period. Musical performances did not exist for the 5 years but grew steadily from 2005 onward, reaching just under 20 participants in 2020.

In stark contrast, the number of people doing Martial arts remained relativily stable, hpvering arroung 35 participants over the two decades despite minor fluctuation. M eanwhile Ameateur dramatics showed an initial marginal rise to about 28 participants in 2005, but subsequantly, plinged over the next 155 years, climbing to a low of roughly 7 participants by 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons from the graph. An effective overview is provided, highlighting the film club as the most popular activity, table tennis as the fastest growing, and amateur dramatics as the only declining one. Data points are accurately cited, such as the film club starting around 64 and table tennis reaching 54 by 2020. Minor inaccuracies in data reading (e.g., writing 'reaching to a low of roughly 7 participants' instead of 6, or 'climbing to a low' which is contradictory phrasing) are present, but overall the response satisfies the requirements well, meriting a solid band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear overall progression. It begins with an introductory paragraph, followed by a clear overview, and subsequent body paragraphs that group data logically by activity trends. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'Conversely', 'Looking at the details', and 'In stark contrast' are used effectively to guide the reader through the comparisons. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different aspects of the graph. Referencing is mostly clear, though some minor mechanical cohesion issues and typos slightly disrupt the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student demonstrates a sufficient and flexible range of vocabulary suited to academic report writing, using terms such as 'flactuated', 'exponentially', 'relativily', and 'plunged'. However, there are several noticeable spelling and word choice errors ('flactuated' for fluctuated, 'Ameateur', 'tannis', 'expereienced', 'relativily', 'hpvering arroung', 'subsequantly', 'plinged', and the unusual phrasing 'climbing to a low'). These errors indicate a lack of precision, preventing the lexical score from reaching higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The writer attempts a good variety of complex sentence structures, incorporating subordinate clauses and participial phrases successfully. There are frequent error-free sentences, demonstrating a good level of grammatical control. However, persistent minor spelling and typographical errors, alongside occasional awkward phrasing (e.g., 'was only activity that witnessed', 'over the next 155 years' instead of 15 years), prevent a higher band, though these errors do not impede communication.

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