Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates data on the numbers of participants for various activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period between 2000 and 2020. There are five different activities in this graph.

From 2000 to 2005, each an every activity maintains nearly the same numbers of participants. From 2005, there was a considarable fluctuation of the data was started. But, from 2005 to 2010 the number of participants for table tennis was remains the same.

The number of participants who engaged in film club was higher throughout the period. It fluctuated slightly around 65. While table tennis players were less in 2010 than in the amateur dramatics, it was higher after 2010. From 2010, number of tennis players shot up from 20 to 50.

The participants for amateur dramatics were decreased from 2005. Moreover, the people who engaged in martial arts were fluctuated minimally throughout the time period. The number of musical performers went up from 2005 and it exceed the number of participants in amateur dramatics in 2015.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The student successfully covers all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview of the trends and reporting the main features of the five activities shown in the line graph. The response highlights the overall dominance of the film club, the dramatic upward trend in table tennis, and the steady decline in amateur dramatics. Comparisons are made appropriately, such as contrasting table tennis and amateur dramatics in 2010. While some minor data points could be expanded further, the key trends are accurately identified and supported with figures from the graph, meeting the requirements of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is organized into clear paragraphs, starting with an introductory statement, followed by general trends and specific body paragraphs detailing individual activities. Cohesive devices such as 'While', 'Moreover', and time markers like 'From 2005 to 2010' are used to connect ideas. However, paragraphing and logical progression could be smoother, and some transitions feel slightly mechanical (e.g., abrupt shifts between sentences in the second paragraph). Overall, the information is presented in a coherent sequence with adequate referencing throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, including terms such as 'participants', 'fluctuated', 'engaged', and 'shot up'. However, there are notable spelling errors ('considarable') and minor word-form or collocation inaccuracies ('each an every activity maintains', 'number of tennis players'). While the writer attempts less common vocabulary, control over these items is inconsistent, and basic typos or awkward phrasing prevent the lexical score from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'While table tennis players were less in 2010 than in the amateur dramatics, it was higher after 2010.' There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, notably tense and verb form inconsistencies ('each an every activity maintains', 'fluctuation of the data was started', 'number of participants... was remains', 'were decreased', 'were fluctuated', 'it exceed'). These errors occasionally cause mild disruption, but communication is not impeded.

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