Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph illustrates how many people participants in different five activities( film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performances) in social center of Australia named Melbourne of two decades. Looking from an overall perspective, all activities participants increase as per time expect amateur dramatics and, film club and martial arts participants seem to be similar i.e about 66 and 37 participants respectively.
Table tennis and musical performances participants dramatically increase with time, as in the year 2000 table tennis participants was only about 17 and musical performances was none participant by the year 2020 participants incline to about 51 and 15 respectively. Martial arts and film club participants fluctuated with time as from the beggning the number of participant are almost similar to the year 2020.
Amateur dramatics seems to followed negative trend as from the year 2000 to 2005 the number of participants was increase however, after 2005 number of participants decline to about 5 in 2020. Amateur dramatics is the only activities which decrease with time.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all parts of the prompt by describing the main trends across the five activities shown in the graph. An overview is attempted in the first paragraph, noting the general upward trend of most categories contrasted with amateur dramatics. However, the task achievement is hindered by several inaccurate data reports and vague generalisations. For example, the student claims that film club and martial arts participants are about 66 and 37 respectively by 2020, which is reasonably accurate, but states that musical performances started with 'none participant' when the graph shows zero at 2000. Furthermore, data referencing lacks precision and contains grammatical interference that obscures specific points. While main features are outlined, the response falls short of a higher band due to inaccurate figures and under-developed comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into three paragraphs, providing a basic structural layout with an introductory overview and body paragraphs dedicated to specific activities. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesion and mechanical referencing. Phrases such as 'Looking from an overall perspective, all activities participants increase as per time expect amateur dramatics' display awkward transition management. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and sometimes inaccurate, resulting in a disjointed flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks clear organisation, making the text occasionally difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary range to describe basic trends, using terms such as 'increase', 'fluctuated', and 'decline'. However, there are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'how many people participants in different five activities', 'none participant', and 'incline to'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary often result in awkward phrasing or incorrect forms. Spelling and word-formation errors (e.g., 'beggning', 'activities' instead of 'activity') are noticeable and occasionally impede communication, placing the response firmly in the Band 5 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and flawed attempts at complex clauses. Grammatical errors are frequent and pervasive throughout the response. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('all activities participants increase', 'number of participant are'), missing prepositions, and incorrect tense usage ('was increase', 'seems to followed'). These persistent errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and distract from the content, though the general meaning remains partially retrievable.
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