Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrate the data on the basic count of participants for distinct activities at one socialcentre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is evident that neraly all acticities remain stable or having little increased during the period expect the amateur dramatics which rapidly decline over the period while the table tennis is most growing action across the graph. Significantly, film club remain same through the time but it top the chart.

To begin, the musical performances was the action which was started in 2005 than it incline little and accounted around 15 million in 2020. Further more, film club and martial arts were the activities which stay constant over the time but the film was more compare to martial arts it was over 60 million while art was under 40 million in final year.

Moving ahead, the amateur dramatics and table tennis were oppsite activities

where on one side table tennis initial at 25 milllion than after a small dip sharply rose to over 50 million on other side it was at approx 25 million in 2000 moreover than it derceased significantly around 2005 at last it was at under 5 million.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by presenting an overview and reporting the main features with some comparisons, such as noting that the film club 'top the chart' while amateur dramatics 'rapidly decline'. However, some ideas are under-developed or inadequately supported, and key features are sometimes imprecise. For instance, the data points for musical performances and table tennis are inaccurately described using millions instead of participants, and some trends are generalised without sufficient clarity. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to select and report data more accurately, ensure all prominent trends are clearly supported with correct units, and provide a fully developed overview that covers all main trajectories without inaccuracies.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response displays a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to structure the answer into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty and mechanical, with awkward transitions like 'Moving ahead' and confusing pronoun referencing, particularly in the fourth paragraph where the description of amateur dramatics and table tennis becomes entangled ('on one side table tennis... on other side it was...'). Paragraphing is present, but internal logical progression is occasionally disrupted by confusing sentence ordering and vague connectors. To improve, the writer should use clearer logical relationships between sentences and ensure that referencing words clearly point to their intended subjects.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing the writer to attempt less common items and describe trends, such as 'rapidly decline', 'remain constant', and 'sharply rose'. However, there is a noticeable presence of spelling mistakes ('neraly', 'acticities', 'derceased', 'oppsite'), word choice errors ('most growing action'), and inappropriate units ('15 million' instead of participants). These lexical inaccuracies and misuses of word forms reflect limitations typical of this level. To achieve a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire with accurate collocations, eliminate spelling errors, and use precise vocabulary suited to data reporting without confusing real-world scales.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some variety in structure. However, there are frequent grammatical errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'The line graph illustrate', 'was the action which was started', and 'initial at 25 milllion than after a small dip'. Punctuation and article usage are also inconsistent, leading to run-on sentences and missing elements that require effort from the reader to decipher. To progress to the next level, the writer needs to increase the proportion of error-free complex sentences and maintain strict control over basic grammatical agreements, tense consistency, and sentence boundaries.

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