Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Here this chart explains how different activities like film club, martial arts, Amateur dramatics, table tennis and music performances held between the years 2000 to 2020 and how many participants were involved in the respective activities during these years

In 2000 people enjoyed all other activities exept music . about 15 participants enjoyed playing table tennis , 25 participants were involved in the Amateur dramatics however,other two activities include more numbers of participants than above given activites , like above 36 people were involved in the Martial art and over 63 were spending their good time in Film clubs

all of these numbers of participants remain same during all these years exept few changes were noted that people started joining the musical events relatively more than in past 2000 it increases upto 18 participants in 2020 which gradually started increasing from 2005 to 2020 and all other remain constantly same . one thing that had hit most participants was table tannis which increases from 2010 and its participants were recorded above 50 in 2020 which were a huge increase from its past numbers which were around 20 during all years

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, presenting a rudimentary overview of the chart without fully or accurately summarising the main trends. The student attempts to report data for various activities, such as stating that 'about 15 participants enjoyed playing table tennis' in 2000, but the overall presentation lacks a clear structure and misses significant long-term shifts. Key trends, such as the dramatic increase in table tennis participation or the steady dominance of the film club, are generalized or inaccurately described, as seen in the sweeping claim that 'all of these numbers of participants remain same during all these years exept few changes'. Furthermore, the idea development is limited and under-developed, relying on vague descriptions rather than precise figures from the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text displays some basic organisation, but there is no clear overall progression or logical structure guiding the reader through the data. The response is divided into very dense blocks of text that lack proper paragraphing, making the progression difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely inadequate, repetitive, or inaccurate; words like 'however', 'exept', and 'like' are misused or overused as basic connectors without establishing clear relationships between clauses or sentences. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear, with pronouns and transitional phrases failing to link ideas smoothly, resulting in a somewhat disjointed reading experience.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The student attempts to use topic-related terms like 'participants', 'activities', and specific pastimes, but frequently misspells words or uses incorrect word forms, such as 'exept', 'activites', 'tannis', and 'musicial'. There is also a lack of precision in describing statistical trends, relying on basic phrasing rather than varied lexical items appropriate for an academic report. To improve to a higher band, the writer needs to expand their range of vocabulary, improve spelling accuracy, and employ more precise functional language for data description.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of structures, relying mostly on simple or poorly linked clauses. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to run-on sentences and grammatical breakdown, as observed in the long, unpunctuated sentence starting with 'all of these numbers of participants remain same'. Frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and articles cause difficulty for the reader throughout the text. For example, phrases like 'music performances held' and 'it increases upto 18 participants in 2020 which gradually started increasing' show poor control over tense consistency and clause integration. Improving grammatical accuracy and varying sentence structures are essential steps for advancement.

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