Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The following chart depicts the estimate of participants, who participated in variety of activities in a social centre of Melbourne, from the year 2000 till 2020.
Overall, the highest number joined the film club, making it a centre of attention, the number of participants were estimated as 63, Whereas, musical performances were most likely to be less attractive to participants, that was the reason the numbers declined overtime.
Table tennis remained constant around 20 contestants until 2010, and gained momentum significantly upto 57 contestants till 2020, On the contrary, The numbers were gaining momentum in Amateur dramatics till 2005, but then it drastically decreased till 2020.
The number of fighters who participated in martial arts, fluctuated by a slight margin, the numbers constantly moved between 30 to 40 throughout the decades. The case was same with film club joiners as the number totalled to be the highest around 65 participants on average. In the entire time, musical performances was not able to gain good momentum from music lovers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by covering the general trends and selecting key features from the chart, such as the film club maintaining high numbers and table tennis experiencing significant growth. However, the information presented contains several inaccuracies when compared to the visual data. For instance, the student states that musical performances were 'most likely to be less attractive... that was the reason the numbers declined overtime,' whereas the chart clearly shows that musical performances started at zero in 2000 and actually increased to 18 by 2020. Furthermore, some ideas are inadequately developed, and the overview lacks clarity regarding the broader picture of the data, which prevents the response from achieving a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has an overall structure with paragraphs dedicated to an introduction, an overview, and body details, showing some sense of organisation. However, there is a lack of clear progression throughout the text, and cohesive devices are sometimes handled mechanically or inaccurately. For example, the use of 'Whereas,' and 'On the contrary,' is awkward and disrupts the logical flow between clauses and sentences. Referencing can also be unclear, such as 'The case was same with film club joiners,' which makes the connection between ideas bumpy. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion needs to be managed more skillfully to guide the reader smoothly through the comparisons.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for communicating basic points, such as 'gained momentum' and 'drastically decreased.' However, the range is limited and contains noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and phrasing that occasionally cause confusion. Examples include 'estimate of participants, who participated in variety of activities' (repetitive and missing articles), 'centre of attention' (inappropriate idiom for data analysis), and 'fighters who participated in martial arts' (inaccurate collocation, as martial arts participants are not fighters in this context). Spelling is generally acceptable, but more precision and a wider variety of less common lexical items are required to move up the scale.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as relative clauses and introductory prepositional phrases. However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent errors that cause some difficulty for the reader. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and punctuation, such as comma splices and misplaced commas ('upto 57 contestants till 2020, On the contrary, The numbers...'). Prepositional usage and article omission also recur ('in social centre of Melbourne', 'in entire time'), and complex structures are frequently faulty. To improve, the student needs to secure better accuracy in basic sentence construction and refine the control of complex grammar.
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