Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants for distinct activities namely film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances at one social center in Melbourne, Australia in 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film club recorded the highest number of participants, whereas table tennis and musical performances experienced increasing number of participants from the first period until last period, however amateur dramatics accumulated declined steadily. While, martial arts fluctuated throughout the period.
Film club decreased consistently at 64 participants in 2000, 61 participants in 2005, exactly 60 participants in 2010, and increased slightly at 64 participants in 2015, and 66 participants in the last period. Moreover, table tennis recorded increased slightly at 18 participants in first period, exactly 20 participants in 2005 and 2010, and rose siginificantly at 48 participants and 55 participants in 2015 and 2020, respectively. While, musical performances accumulated the lowest participants at exactly 0 participants, 11 participants, 19 participants, and 20 participants in 2005 to 2020, respectively.
On the other hand, amateur dramatics experienced grow gradually at 28 participants in 2000, 29 participants in 2005, and declined significantly from 2010 to 2020. However, martial arts fluctuated throughout the period at 38 participants in 2000 and 2010, 31 participants in 2005 and 2015, and 32 participants in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by providing an overview and reporting the main features and trends of the five activities shown in the line graph. The overview captures the general trajectory of the data, noting the film club's prominence, the upward trends of table tennis and musical performances, the decline in amateur dramatics, and the fluctuations in martial arts. However, some ideas and figures are slightly under-developed or contain minor inaccuracies compared to the visual data, such as quoting exact numbers that slightly misalign with the graph (e.g., musical performances starting at 0 and rising differently). This positions the response comfortably in the middle band, successfully covering the requirements while showing some minor limitations in precise data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear division into introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that separate the different activities logically. Information and ideas flow reasonably well, and the progression from general trends to specific data points is mostly clear. However, cohesion is at times mechanical or faulty, with awkward transitional phrases such as 'While, martial arts fluctuated' and 'Moreover, table tennis recorded increased slightly'. Furthermore, referencing and paragraph linking could be smoother to achieve a fully natural and seamless progression of ideas. Paragraphing is used adequately, but mechanical cohesive devices prevent the response from reaching a higher band.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common lexical items related to data trends such as 'fluctuated', 'declined steadily', and 'rose significantly'. However, there are notable instances of awkward word choice, incorrect word forms, and collocation errors, such as 'accumulated declined steadily', 'recorded increased slightly', and 'experienced grow gradually'. While these lexical inaccuracies and minor spelling slips do not impede communication, they restrict the vocabulary score to the competent level. To improve, the student needs to pay closer attention to word formation and ensure that verbs and adjectives are paired naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like subordinate clauses and comparative expressions. However, there are frequent errors in grammar and sentence structure, particularly involving awkward verb patterns, tense consistency, and prepositional usage, such as 'experienced grow gradually' instead of 'experienced gradual growth', and punctuation slips. Although these errors rarely impede communication and the reader can follow the overall meaning, the presence of these recurring structural inaccuracies places the grammar score below the threshold for higher bands. A greater focus on accurate verb forms and syntactic control is required.
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