Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The graph illustrates the number of Melbourne’s people who was participated in five types of different activities between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, the figure of film club was far high then any other activities throughout the period. Amateur dramatics was the only activities, in which people lost their interest over the year.

The member of film club slightly decreased from 2000 to 2010, then again the number start to increase and in final year it reached near 65, which was almost same as year 2000.In martial arts program the figure went through a ups and down situation from 2000 to 2020 and finally remained in around 40, which is same as 2000.Participation in table tennis initially was below 20, but in 2005 it increased to 20 and stayed same until 2010. After that the figure dramatically rose to near 60 in 2020 and secured the second position in terms of participations number. Although people didn’t choose musical performance until 2005, they suddenly became interested and start joining after that and number gradually went up to near 15 in the end of the period.

In contrast, participation in amateur dramatics massively decreased after 2005.Though in first five years the figure increased slightly and reached near 30, but later it went down and ended up with 5 member approximately.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and making relevant comparisons across the five activities shown in the chart. An overview is provided, highlighting key trends such as the film club remaining the most popular and amateur dramatics declining. However, some areas are slightly under-developed or contain minor inaccuracies in data reporting, such as stating that martial arts remained around 40 when it was actually closer to 35, and placing musical performances near 15 instead of slightly under 20. To reach the higher band, the response would need to consistently report data with greater precision and extend the overview to capture more nuanced relationships between the categories.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression from the introduction to the overview and body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used to group related activities, though the division between paragraphs could be managed more effectively to separate rising and falling trends cleanly. Cohesive devices are used adequately, such as 'Overall', 'After that', and 'In contrast', but referencing is occasionally mechanical or repetitive. The use of pronouns and substitution could be more varied to ensure smoother transitions between sentences. To achieve a higher band, the logical flow and organisational structure would need to be more sophisticated and seamless throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The writer demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting less common items such as 'dramatically rose', 'massively decreased', and 'participation'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice, collocation, and word formation, such as 'Melbourne’s people who was participated', 'the figure of film club was far high then', and 'number of participations'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but awkward phrasing like 'ups and down situation' detracts from precision. To move to the next band, the student needs to use a wider and more flexible range of vocabulary with greater accuracy in collocation and stylistic control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some attempt at subordinate clauses. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and articles, such as 'who was participated', 'the number start to increase', 'the member of film club', and 'with 5 member approximately'. Punctuation is also occasionally weak, missing full stops between independent clauses. These errors reflect a limitation in grammatical control that prevents the writing from attaining a higher band. To improve, the student must produce a higher proportion of error-free sentences and exercise better control over complex grammatical structures.

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