Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE MULTIPAL LINE CHART ILLUSTRIGHTS ABOUT HOW MANY INDIVIDUALS PARTICIPATE IN DIFFERENT ACTIVITIES AT ONE CERTRE IN AUSTRALIA AND MELBOURNE FROM 2000 TO 2020.
TO BEGIN WITH FILM CLUB , MOST OF THE PEOPLE INTERESED I FILM CLUB IN ALL YEARS NEALY 70 INDIVIDUALS. HOWEVER, MARTIAL ARTS WERE LESS POPULERED AS COMPERE TO THEFIM CLUB AROUND 35 INDIVIDUALS TOOK PART IN IT. IN 2000 PEOPLE AROUND 25 PARTICIPATED IN AMATEUR DRAMATICS WHILE IN 2010 IT DECREASED BY 20 PEOPLE. FROM 2010 TO 2020 IT DECLINED SHARPLY AND ONLY 5 PEOPLE PARTICIPATED IN IT.
TABLE TENNIS WERE VERY LESS POPULERED IN 2000 AROUND 5 HUMANS TOOK PART IN IT.WHEREAS IN 2010 IT GREW SHARPLY 50 PEOPLE PARTICIPATED IN 2020. ALTHOUGH , NO ONE INTERESED IN MUSICAL ACTIVITY IN 2005. FROM 2010 TO 2020 IT GRADUALLY INCREASED.
OVERALL, MOST OF THE HUMANS WERE LIKED FILM CLUB WHILE TABLE TENNIS WERE VERY LESS LIKED BY INDIVIDUAL BUT FROM 2010 IT CLIMED VERY FAST. IN ADDITION MUSICAL ACTIVITY VERY LESS FAMOUS AMONG PEOPLE.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task partially by attempting to describe the main features and trends of the line chart. However, several figures are misreported or inaccurate, such as stating that nearly 70 individuals participated in the film club across all years (when values fluctuated around 60-66) or claiming that amateur dramatics decreased by 20 people in 2010 (when it was actually around 20 total participants). The overview is simplistic and attempts to summarize the data, but the lack of accurate data reporting and limited development mean the response remains restricted at this level. To improve, the writer must ensure that data points are read correctly from the graph and that key comparisons between categories are made more precise.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some basic organization with paragraphs attempting to group different activities, but there is no clear overall progression across the text. Cohesive devices are repetitive and sometimes awkward, such as starting multiple sentences with 'TO BEGIN WITH', 'HOWEVER', and 'ALTHOUGH' without smooth transitions. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas feels disjointed. Referencing and logical sequencing need to be strengthened to guide the reader through the data more effectively. To achieve a higher band, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive ties naturally and ensure that the progression of ideas from the introduction to the body and overview follows a logical, connected path.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and basic, with frequent errors in word choice, word form, and spelling that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'MULTIPAL' instead of multiple, 'ILLUSTRIGHTS' instead of illustrates, 'CERTRE' instead of centre, 'POPULERED' instead of popular, and the unnatural use of 'HUMANS' instead of people or participants. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary like 'GRADUALLY INCREASED' and 'DECLINED SHARPLY', but lexical control is weak throughout. To progress, the student needs to build a more accurate vocabulary specific to describing data and eliminate basic spelling and word-formation errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent grammatical errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and pluralization, such as 'TABLE TENNIS WERE VERY LESS POPULERED' and 'MARTIAL ARTS WERE'. Attempts at complex structures are faulty or missing altogether, and punctuation is inconsistent, with missing commas and erratic capitalization. Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader. To reach the next level, the writer should incorporate a mix of complex sentence forms, ensure proper subject-verb agreement, and work on reducing basic grammatical inaccuracies.
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