Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of people who participated in five different activities at a social centre in melbourne, Australia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, it is evident that the Film club was the most popular activity throughout the period, although its participation fighres fluctuated slightly. In contrast, Table tennis experienced a substantial increase and become second most popular activity. Whereas, decline in Musical performance and it has increase participants gradually.
To commence with, in 2000 around 65 people took part in the Film club,it was slightly decrease in 2010 and reached to 60, and at the end of period it became highest more than the 65 citizens participated. On the other hand, the Martial arts indicates fluctuation during the time period of 2000 to 2020. However, the Amateur dramatics had participation about 25 person in 2000, in 2010 in reached to the 15 people. After that this activity were dropped number of participants by the end of period.
Moving to the remaining data, the secong highest activities were more number of participants was Tabe tennis. from 2000 to 2010 it had approximately15 people in that activity. Surprisingly, it rose significantly near to the 60 at the end of the year.Lastly, the Musical performances there were no any participation in this activity in 2000, while in 2010 it reached to the total 10 number of people and then it gradually surged by 2020 it has a more than 10 participants.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features and trends of the five activities, such as identifying the Film club as the most popular throughout and noting the significant rise in Table tennis. However, some ideas are under-developed or inadequately supported, and there are occasional inaccuracies in reporting specific details, such as misinterpreting the final data points for Amateur dramatics and Musical performances. The overview provided in the second paragraph captures general trends, but lacks precision. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that all key data points are cited accurately and that every trend is fully and clearly elaborated with precise figures from the graph.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The essay has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that separate the data logically. Paragraphing is used appropriately to group related activities. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in awkward transitions like 'Whereas, decline in Musical performance' and 'To commence with'. Reference words and cohesive devices are occasionally inaccurate or repetitive, which interrupts the smooth progression of ideas. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of seamless cohesive devices and ensure that sentences link together naturally without abrupt shifts in structure.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey basic trends such as 'fluctuated slightly', 'substantial increase', and 'gradually surged'. However, there is a noticeable presence of word-choice errors, incorrect word forms, and spelling mistakes—such as 'fighres', 'secong', and 'Tabe tennis'—that occasionally hinder the precision of your writing. Attempts to use less common vocabulary sometimes result in unnatural phrasing, for instance, 'the secong highest activities were more number of participants was'. To achieve a higher band, expand your lexical repertoire and refine your control over word choice, word formation, and spelling to ensure accuracy and natural style.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a limited range of sentence structures, relying on a mix of simple forms and attempted complex sentences that frequently contain grammatical errors. Examples of errors include awkward relative clauses, missing prepositions, and tense inconsistencies, such as 'it was slightly decrease in 2010', 'this activity were dropped number of participants', and 'while in 2010 it reached to the total 10 number of people'. These frequent errors in grammar and punctuation can cause some difficulty for the reader. To move up to the next band, you need to demonstrate better control over complex sentence patterns, verb forms, and subject-verb agreement, producing more error-free sentences throughout.
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