Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The chart shows participants numbers joining several activities at Australian social center in Malbourne between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is clear that there was huge variation in the number of people taking part in the five activities throughout the period.

In 2000 , the Film club had the hightes numbers of participants of nearly 65 ,followed by Martial arts by a wide margin as It reached nearly 35 participants , meanwhile amateur dramatics and table tennis had a considerable lower rate between 10 and 30 joined people.

It wasnot untill 2005 the Musical performances started to have participants where at the same time there were a slight changes in the other activities as amateur dramatics and table tennis had increasment rate on the constrant of Film club and Martial arts that dealt with a drop.

for the next five years and by 2010 , film club resumed decline , amateur dramatics had dipped rate from nearly 30 participants to below 20 ,and for the table tennis it had levelled off rate of nearly 20 participants ,on the other hand ,Musical performances had a climb rate of slightly above 10 participants alongside Martial arts that had gradual increase reaching about 40 participants.

Film club started to recover between 2010 and 2020 with a sharp rise with 40 more participants overcoming Martial arts that had a fluctuating rate ,but manages to held the third place , in addition , Musical performances continued growing with nearly 10 more participants in those teen years.

The most significant changes that occured in 2020 was that the amateur dramatics countinued its dipping as a result it recorded the lowest number of participants among all the activities with nearly less than 10 people , although film club participants numbers remained ahead of all .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses the main parts of the task by attempting to report overall trends and select features from the chart, such as noting the highest and lowest points for the Film club and amateur dramatics. However, some ideas are under-developed or inaccurately described. For instance, the writer claims the Film club experienced a sharp rise with '40 more participants' between 2010 and 2020, which misinterprets the graph data where the figures rose from 60 to 66. Similarly, details regarding other activities are sometimes vague or poorly linked to the actual numbers. While an overview is attempted, the lack of precision and under-developed comparison across the entire timeline prevents the response from reaching a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement and is divided into paragraphs, which helps guide the reader through the various stages of the timeline. Cohesive devices are used to connect ideas, such as 'Overall', 'meanwhile', 'for the next five years', and 'in addition'. However, referencing and cohesion are sometimes faulty or mechanical, as seen in awkward transitions like 'It wasnot untill 2005 the Musical performances started...' and run-on structures that obscure the logical progression. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion within sentences can be repetitive or cumbersome, reflecting a typical performance at this level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is minimally adequate for the task, attempting some less common items such as 'fluctuating rate', 'resumed decline', and 'significant changes'. However, there are noticeable errors in word choice, word form, and spelling throughout the text, including 'Malbourne' instead of Melbourne, 'hightes', 'increasment rate', 'constrant', 'It wasnot untill', and 'countinued'. These lexical slips and incorrect word forms limit precision and occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader, keeping the lexical score at this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a limited range of structures, with attempts at complex sentences that are frequently faulty. Examples of grammatical errors include missing articles ('at Australian social center'), incorrect verb forms or tenses ('managed to held', 'did that dealt with a drop'), and punctuation errors such as spaces before commas and full stops. Simple sentences are handled with reasonable success, but errors in prepositions and clause structures are frequent and can cause difficulty for the reader, preventing the text from achieving a higher score.

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