Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph shows us the amount of people involved in several hobbies from 2000 to 2020 at a single social center in Melbourne, Australia.
In 2000, there were around 63 participants in the film club which reamined constant and at the top throughout those twenty years. However, Table tennis also gained so much reputation that it goes from 16 participants in 2000 to around 53 participants in 2020 which was the highest number of people got involved in any club with this pace.While,In Martial arts there were may fluctuations and it remained at 40 members from 2000 to 2020 with no increase in popularity.People showed no interest in Amateuur dramatics and after a slight increase in 2005 it started declining and reached about 2 contestants in 2020. Musical performances was the one which started very late in 2005 but it gained much membershps at the end of 2020 with bout 18 contestants.
Overall,Film Club remained at the top with the most number of members and Martial arts was the one club which gained the most numbers of people in their club . While, Amateuur dramatics dropped to the bottom with the least amount of members.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the main parts of the task by reporting on the activities over the twenty-year period, but it suffers from several inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the writer states that Martial arts 'remained at 40 members from 2000 to 2020 with no increase in popularity' when the figures fluctuate between 32 and 38. Additionally, the overview section contains a contradiction, mistakenly claiming that Martial arts gained the most numbers of people while simultaneously stating in the body that Table tennis achieved the highest growth. Some ideas are under-developed or inaccurately supported, pulling the task achievement score down to this level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The essay presents a recognizable overall structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the logical progression is hindered by mechanical and repetitive cohesive devices. Words like 'While' and 'However' are sometimes used abruptly or introduced with punctuation errors (e.g., 'While,In'). Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow of ideas lacks seamless transitions. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as ambiguous pronouns, which means the organisation remains basic and lacks the clear progression required for higher bands.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is minimally adequate for the task, featuring basic terms like 'amount of people', 'hobbies', and 'participants'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'reputation' instead of popularity and 'contestants' instead of participants, but these word choices are somewhat unnatural or imprecise in this academic context. There are also occasional word-form and spelling errors, such as 'reamined' and 'Amateuur', though these do not completely impede communication. To improve, the student needs to use more precise domain-specific collocations and ensure accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student uses a limited range of sentence structures, primarily relying on simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions or faulty complex structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, such as tense inconsistencies, missing or incorrect prepositions, and punctuation mistakes (e.g., 'it goes from' instead of 'went from', missing spaces after commas, and 'much membershps'). These errors require the reader to work harder to understand the intended meaning, reflecting the typical constraints of this grammar band.
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