Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the number of participants in different activities at a social events centre in Australia over a period of time.
The chart reveals that film club remained the most popular activity throughout the period, although its participation fluctuated slightly. The number of people in martial arts was approximately same in 2000 and 2020.
The film club had the highest number of participants with more than 60 people taking part throughout while approximately 35 people participated in martial arts. in contrast , in amateur dramatic a drastic change had been seen after 2010 , there was a sharp decline over the period of time.
participation in table tennsi increased significantly over the period. the number if participants rose from approximately 16 in 200 to 20 in 2005 and 2010, before increasing sharply to 53 in 2020. Musical performances came late in the world. it was started in the year 2005 and liked by people .it had an incredibly Good participation till 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features, such as identifying the film club as the most popular activity and noting the inverse trends of amateur dramatics and table tennis. However, some aspects of the data are presented with limited development or slight generalisations, and the overview could be more clearly synthesised. For instance, stating that the number of people in martial arts was approximately the same in 2000 and 2020 misses the intermediate fluctuations that occurred in 2010. While the key comparisons are made and the information is generally accurate, a fully extended discussion of all trends is needed to reach a higher level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text has a coherent overall arrangement and follows a logical sequence from an introductory sentence to body paragraphs describing individual trends. However, paragraphing is somewhat disjointed and mechanical, with short, isolated sentences at the end of the text that disrupt the flow. Cohesive devices are sometimes used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the abrupt transition 'in contrast , in amateur dramatic a drastic change had been seen after 2010' and the colloquial phrasing 'Musical performances came late in the world'. Referencing is not always clear, and the overall progression lacks seamless links between ideas.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items such as 'fluctuated slightly', 'drastic change', and 'sharp decline'. However, there are notable inaccuracies in word choice, collocation, and word form, including spelling errors like 'tennsi' for tennis and missing plurals or incorrect derivations such as 'amateur dramatic'. Expressions like 'came late in the world' and 'incredibly Good participation' are unnatural and reveal limitations in control over style. These errors do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the response from achieving a higher mark.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and time markers successfully in places. There are, however, some recurring errors in grammar, punctuation, and mechanics, such as missing capitalisation at the start of sentences ('in contrast', 'participation', 'it was started'), incorrect spacing around punctuation marks, and occasional awkward phrasing in verb structures. While these errors rarely impede communication and the majority of simple sentences are clear, the frequency of punctuation slips and minor structural inaccuracies keeps the control at this level.
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