Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the information regarding participants of various social centre activities in an Australian city, Melbourne from 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the film club remains on top but is steady through out this time frame, whereas, the participating individuals of table tennis have accelerated through these years. In contrast to that, amateur dramatics has dropped significantly over the years. Martial arts, has been steady, with minor ups and downs, and musical performances have gained attraction of some people after 2005, and has been going up since then.

In 2000, number of participants of film club were nearly 65, with a slight dip to 60 in 2010 it returns back to 50 by 2020. On the other hand, the number of participants of table tennis were approximately 15, slowly rising to 20 in 2010, and then sky rocketing to 55 in 2020. Where as, opposite can be seen in amateur dramatics, which drops consistently from 25 and reached a lowest number of 7 participants in 2020. Martial arts maintains its momentum, with slight dips and rises, it starts from 37 in 2000 and than ends on the same value again in 2020. Lastly, mucical performance was insignificant in 2000, gained some popularity in 2010 with 11 participants, and rise to 17 participants in 2020.

In conclusion, the number of participants remain consistent in film club and martial arts, with majority participating in film club. The reverse popularity was seen in amateur dramatics and table tennis, one increasing in number of participants and other dropping.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully addresses all parts of the prompt, providing an overview of the main trends and making relevant comparisons across the five activities. The key features of the graph are identified, such as the dominance of the film club, the dramatic rise in table tennis, and the sharp decline in amateur dramatics. However, some aspects of the response are slightly under-developed or contain minor data inaccuracies, such as stating that the film club 'returns back to 50 by 2020' when the figure actually rose to 66. This places the task response comfortably at the upper half of the mid-range bands, where the main trends are clearly reported, but minor lapses in data precision prevent a higher rating.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The text presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression from an introductory summary to detailed body paragraphs and a concluding overview. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different features of the graph. Cohesive devices are employed to signal contrasts and transitions, such as 'whereas', 'in contrast to that', 'on the other hand', and 'lastly'. However, some referencing is slightly mechanical or repetitive, and a few cohesive links are awkward (e.g., 'Where as, opposite can be seen in amateur dramatics'). These minor faults in cohesion prevent the response from achieving a higher band, though the overall structure remains clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, successfully conveying trends and movements with phrases like 'steady', 'accelerated', 'dropped significantly', and 'sky rocketing'. The writer attempts less common lexical items, though some word choices and collocations are slightly imprecise, such as 'mucical performance was insignificant' instead of negligible or minimal. There are also occasional lexical slips and spelling errors, such as 'mucical' instead of 'musical' and 'sky rocketing'. These errors do not impede communication, allowing the reader to easily follow the report, but the frequency of minor inaccuracies keeps the score at this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and introductory prepositional phrases. There is control over basic verb tenses used to describe past and present data. However, there are noticeable grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'number of participants... were', 'the number of participants remain'), missing articles (e.g., 'in film club'), punctuation slips, and awkward prepositional phrasing. While these errors rarely impede communication, their consistent presence across simple and complex structures is characteristic of this grammatical level.

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