Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrate the detail on the numbers of canidates for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the duration 2000 to 2020.

Overall, the participants in film club shows higest trend, while musical performance at social centre in Melbourne demonstrates lowest trend. The number of canidates intrested in both film club and martial arts approximately stable. At the beginning, the numbers of individuals remained stable and then increasing guadually in these activities table tennis and musical performances. Whereas, the activity in amateur dramatics few canidates added in the began, after that decreased sharply.

The number of participants in film club at least stable only few number in 2010, then slowly rise and remain stable in 2020. If we compared the martial arts activity that also constant but fluctuated between 2000 and 2015. The number of table tennis players starting from 16 canidates in 2000 increased only few players in 2005 that is 20 and the remained stable in 2010. After that, an upward sharply.

In contrast, amateur dramatics activity some canidates rise in the begin and then decreased sharply. But, the musical performance participants stable in 2000 to 2005 and then increased and overtake amateur dramatics canidates in 2015.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response makes an attempt to summarise the main features of the graph, identifying key activities such as the film club and table tennis, and providing an overview at the beginning. However, the task is only partially addressed because several descriptions are confusing, inaccurate, or poorly supported by the data. For instance, the claim that musical performances started at zero in 2000 and 2005 is correct, but statements regarding trends in amateur dramatics and martial arts lack clarity and precision. Some ideas are underdeveloped, and the overall reporting of data points contains inaccuracies, such as misinterpreting the fluctuations and final values of several series. To move to a higher level, the writer needs to select and report the main trends much more accurately, ensuring that all comparisons are factually correct and clearly presented.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text demonstrates some general organisation with an introductory overview and separate body paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, with awkward transitions such as 'If we compared the martial arts activity that also constant' and 'In contrast, amateur dramatics activity'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of paragraphs lacks logical linking, making the progression difficult to follow at times. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as pronoun use and ambiguous connectors. To improve, the writer should use a wider variety of cohesive devices more accurately and ensure that each sentence flows logically into the next, maintaining a clear and easy-to-follow structure throughout.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and just minimally adequate for the task. There is an over-reliance on basic terms and frequent errors in word choice, word form, and spelling, such as 'canidates' instead of 'candidates', 'higest' instead of 'highest', 'intrested', 'guadually', and 'began' used as a noun. While the writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'approximately stable' and 'upward sharply', these attempts often result in unnatural collocations or ungrammatical phrases. These noticeable errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher score, the writer must expand their vocabulary range, learn correct word forms and spellings, and practice using precise lexical items related to data trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', and 'significant'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex ones. Frequent grammatical errors are present throughout the text, including missing verbs (e.g., 'The graph illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, poor preposition usage, and missing articles. For example, phrases like 'the activity in amateur dramatics few canidates added in the began' and 'participants stable in 2000 to 2005' exhibit serious structural flaws that cause considerable difficulty for the reader. Control over basic grammatical patterns is weak. To reach the next level, the writer needs to practice forming accurate simple and complex sentences, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, and ensure correct tense consistency when describing past statistical data.

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