Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This graph illustrates information on the numbers of participants from 2000 to 2020 for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia.

Overall, the film club had the highest participants over all time. Table tennis and musical performances showed a significant growth all over the time. In contrast, participations in amateur dramatic had declined significantlly. Whereas martial arts had flactuated over the time.

In 2000, film club has the highest participants , at 65 and had declined a little bit and became 60 in 2010. Table tennis didn't grow that much till 2010 , it was accounted at almost 20. There was no participant for musical performances till 2005 and reached at 10 in 2010. Participants of amateur dramatics had declined from 2005 and in 2010 it became 20 from almost 30. In 2000, martial arts had almost 38 but it showed a flactuation till 2010 and became almost same as 2000, at almost 40.

From 2010, film club showed a significant growth and participator became 70 in 2020. On the contrary, ameture dramatic diminished a lot till 2020 and became almost 0 while table tennis showed a momentous growth from 2010 and became almost 55 in 2020. Musical performances had almost 20 in 2020. Moreover, martial art didn't grow that much and still the same as 2000 for the flactuation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the task by selecting and reporting the main features of the graph, presenting a clear overview of the overall trends. For instance, you correctly noted that the film club maintained the highest participation levels overall, while table tennis experienced significant growth. However, some ideas are slightly under-developed or contain minor inaccuracies in specific data points; for example, stating that martial arts reached 'almost 40' in 2000 and 2010 overlooks the exact figures provided in the prompt (36 and 38 respectively). To reach a higher band, you should ensure that specific data points are reported with greater precision and that comparisons between categories are more fully extended.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

Your essay has a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression from an introduction to an overview and subsequent body paragraphs detailing specific timeframes. You make use of cohesive devices to structure your writing, such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', 'Whereas', and 'On the contrary'. However, cohesion is at times a bit mechanical or faulty, and referencing can occasionally be unclear, as seen in the transition between paragraphs where the flow of data points feels slightly disjointed. To achieve a higher score, you should ensure that cohesive devices are used more flexibly and that each paragraph flows seamlessly into the next, maintaining a clear and logical thread throughout the response.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common lexical items such as 'significant growth', 'flactuated', and 'momentous growth'. However, there are noticeable vocabulary and spelling errors, such as 'participator' instead of 'participants', 'ameture' instead of 'amateur', and 'flactuated' instead of 'fluctuated', along with word choice inaccuracies like 'diminished a lot'. These errors do not seriously impede communication, placing your lexical control at this level. To improve, you need to expand your range of less common vocabulary and improve your spelling and precision in word choice and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response employs a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating some control over sentence structure. You attempted various tenses to describe past trends, such as 'had declined' and 'showed a significant growth'. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'participations in amateur dramatic had declined'), and missing articles or prepositions. These errors can sometimes cause difficulty for the reader. To move up to a higher band, you need to produce a higher proportion of error-free sentences and demonstrate better control over complex grammatical structures and punctuation.

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