Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given graph illustrates the numbers of participantsfor different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Table tennis experienced a high rise overall the period. On the other hand Amateur dramatics experienced downfall overall the period. Musical performances saw a slight rise in a specific time. While, Film club and Martial arts remained constant in the whole period.
In contrast, Table tennis started in 2000 with number fo 18 participants In 2005 it saw a slight rise but after 2010 it experienced a high rise and reached uoto 52 participants in 2020. Amature dramatics started form 2000 and have 23 participants In 2005 it observe slight rise but after that it experienced a downfall and In 2020 it has only 6 participants. Musical performances was only wo started from 2005 with 0 participant and within 15 years it experienced slight rise and in 2020 it has 18 participants.Film club started from 38 participants in 2000 and Martial arts started from 62 participants in 2000 but both experienced rise and falls overall the period.
Table tennis is dominant in overall the period and Musical performances also experienced only rise in the graph. While Amateur dramatics experienced downfall in whole graph. And at last, Film club and Martial arts experienced both downfall and rise at the same time over all the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt by summarizing the main trends of the activities shown in the graph. However, the information presented is partially inaccurate and lacks clear overview development. For instance, the student states that the Film club and Martial arts remained constant throughout the whole period, whereas the data shows fluctuations for both activities. Additionally, some initial starting values and final figures are incorrectly reported, such as claiming the Film club started with 38 participants when the chart shows 64. The overview provided in the second paragraph is underdeveloped and disjointed, preventing the task achievement from reaching a higher level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is an attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, but the overall progression of ideas is lacking. The text relies heavily on repetitive transitional phrases such as "overall the period" and "started from 2000" rather than a varied and natural sequence of cohesive devices. Paragraphing is disjointed, with the writer splitting observations into multiple short paragraphs that often reiterate points already made, such as repeating the overall trends in the final paragraph. Referencing and logical sequencing need more precision to guide the reader smoothly through the comparative data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer successfully employs basic trend vocabulary such as "rise", "downfall", and "slight rise", but attempts at less common phrasing or precise descriptions lead to noticeable errors and inaccuracies, such as writing "high rise" instead of a sharp or significant increase. There are also occasional word form and spelling slips, such as "Amature" instead of amateur and "upto". While meaning is generally conveyed, the lexical range remains restricted and repetitive.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences joined by basic coordinators. When the writer attempts more complex structures, errors frequently occur in punctuation, prepositions, and verb forms, such as "number fo 18 participants" and missing capitalization or full stops between clauses. Errors in agreement and tense consistency are also present throughout the text, creating frequent distractions and making some sentences difficult for the reader to parse.
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