Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates informatiob about number of particpants takng part iin different activities in the social center of Melbourne, Australia for the time period 2000 to 2020.
Overall the graph illustrates information about the number of participants who take part in the activities for the time period 2000 to 2020 as it giviing information about five differnet activities which take place at the social center in Melbourne named as Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis, Musical perfomances. we can see clearly that Table tennis got the significant gain in number of participants over the tiime period while on the other hand Amateur dramatics faced a significant drop in number of participants and the other three remaining activites got a gradual increase in their number of participants over the time period.
Moreover the line graph shows that the gain in table tennis is so significant that it goes from about 20 to 30 participants and goes with more than 50 participants in 2020 while on the opposite side Amateur dramatics start from more than 10 participants and goes with participants near to 5 only. all the other three remained same as they gradually got similar gain.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response covers the main activity categories and attempts to highlight key trends, such as the significant growth in table tennis and the decline in amateur dramatics. However, the data presented contains inaccuracies or vague descriptions, such as stating that table tennis goes from about 20 to 30 participants when it actually started around 16. Furthermore, the overview is repetitive, restating the prompt introduction multiple times rather than providing a concise summary of the overall trends. The detail for several activities remains limited and under-developed, meaning the task is addressed only partially.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some basic organization with an introductory and a concluding body paragraph style, but the progression of information lacks clarity. The response suffers from heavy repetition, particularly in the introduction and overview where the prompt is restated unnecessarily. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive manner, such as the frequent reliance on 'over the time period' and 'while on the other hand'. Paragraphing is also poorly managed, as the entire body of the response is clumped together into long, dense blocks without logical separation between the overview features and the specific data details.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with frequent spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'informatiob', 'particpants', 'takng', 'iin', 'differnet', 'perfomances', and 'tiime'. Word choices are often repetitive, with basic phrasing like 'number of participants' and 'gradual increase' reused excessively. While the student attempts some functional vocabulary related to trends, such as 'significant gain' and 'significant drop', the numerous spelling and word-form inaccuracies cause noticeable strain and difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical range is quite limited, relying heavily on simple or over-extended run-on sentences connected by conjunctions like 'and' rather than varied complex structures. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including missing or incorrect articles ('in the social center' instead of 'at a social centre'), preposition usage ('taking part iin'), and punctuation errors like missing capitalization and full stops (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase 'we can see'). These frequent errors and faulty complex structures disrupt the flow and cause difficulty in places.
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