Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph below illustrates the numbers of participants for different activities at social centre in Malbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Overall, film clud remain dominant and also experienced fluctuations in the graph and Martial arts also fluctuated overall the period. Table tennis and Musical performances experienced high rise in a given period and on the other hand Amateur dramatics experienced downfall overall the period.
In 2000, film clud remain dominant and have 64 participants however, this numbers fell down in 2005 and reached to 62. It subsiquently recovered and reached to 66 in 2020. Martial arts started from 36 in 2000 and also experienced downfall in 2005 and have 32 participants after that it experienced slight rise but it observe fluctations throughout the period. Participants from table tennis increased from 16 in 2000 to 20 in 2005and remain unchanged in 2010 but after that it experienced sharply rise in 2015 and approximately 38 participants and 50 in 2020. By contrast, amature dramatics started from 26 in 2000 and after slight rise in 2005 has 28 but after that it experienced downfall throughout the period and approximately 8 participants by the end of the period. At last, musical performances had no participants in 2000 and 2005 but it attract 12 participants in 2010. The figure rose gradually to approximatley 16 in 2015 and 18 in 2020.
Film club remian dominant and has more participants then others. Table tennis experienced sharp rise and amature dramatics see downfall overall the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5
The response addresses all parts of the task by presenting an overview and covering the trends for all five activities shown in the graph. The overview successfully highlights the main features, noting that the Film club remained dominant while Table tennis and Musical performances experienced significant increases, whereas Amateur dramatics declined. However, some details are slightly inaccurate or under-developed; for instance, the writer states that Amateur dramatics reached approximately 8 participants by the end of the period when the graph shows around 6. Furthermore, the final paragraph unnecessarily repeats information already stated. To achieve a higher band, the response would need to ensure greater precision in reporting all specific data points and avoid repetitive concluding summaries.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a coherent overall arrangement and attempts to group information logically by activity, with a clear introductory paragraph and an overview. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and awkward, particularly in how sentences are linked within the body paragraph. The overuse of transitional phrases like 'after that' and 'subsequently' creates a repetitive rhythm rather than a smooth logical progression. Paragraphing is also somewhat unconventional, as the final summary is isolated into a very brief single-sentence paragraph. To reach the next level, the writer needs to employ a wider and more flexible range of cohesive devices without repetition and ensure that paragraph structures are fully developed and logically balanced.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully conveying basic trends through words such as 'dominant', 'fluctuations', 'downfall', and 'gradually'. However, there are numerous noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'club' misspelled as 'clud', 'subsequently' as 'subsiquently', 'amateur' as 'amature', and 'Malbourne'. Additionally, awkward phrasing such as 'experienced high rise' and 'attract 12 participants' limits precision. These lexical errors and awkward collocations occasionally distract the reader. To move up to a higher band, the writer must expand their lexical repertoire, use less common vocabulary more accurately, and eliminate recurring spelling mistakes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures such as time clauses and contrastive connectors. However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent, with frequent errors including missing articles ('at social centre', 'from table tennis'), incorrect prepositions ('overall the period' instead of 'over the period'), subject-verb agreement issues ('film clud remain', 'it observe fluctations'), and run-on sentences with missing punctuation. While these errors rarely completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the overall accuracy of the writing. To achieve a higher band, the student needs to produce a greater proportion of error-free sentences and demonstrate tighter control over tense consistency and basic grammatical structures.
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