Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given polyline graph illustrate the information about the numbers of participants for different activities such as Film club, Martial arts, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia in 2000 to 2020.
Overall, Musical performaces had highest number of participants take part in this activity in [redacted phone] while table tennis had second number. Other activities shows fluctuations in their number over the year.
To initiate with, In 2000, number of participants take part in table tennis was 15 persons followed by amateur dramatics was 25. The contestants of table tennis was increased up to 20 in 2005 and remained stable in 2010. After 2010 its fluctuate up to 55 in 2020 while amateur dramatics started from 25, and increased upto 28 in 2005. After 2005, its gradually decreased up tp 15 in 2010 and reached to 5 in 2020.
In 2000, Martial arts was started at 37 then flucation arises over the period, in 2020 it reached around 38 whereas, film club started at 65 in 2000 and
dropped down upto 60 in 2010, after this year it rises up to 66 in 2020. Musical performances started in 2005 and reached upto 18 in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by reporting several features from the chart, but the information provided is partially inaccurate and poorly selected. For example, the overview contains a major confusion by stating that musical performances had the highest number of participants, which directly contradicts the visual data showing that the film club consistently had the highest numbers while musical performances had the lowest. Furthermore, some data points are misread or confused throughout the body paragraphs, such as the initial values for table tennis and amateur dramatics. Ideas are limited and under-developed, lacking a clear and accurate summary of the main trends across the twenty-year period. To reach a higher level, the response needs to accurately identify and report the primary trends and highest-level data points without factual contradictions.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response shows some basic organisation with an introduction, body paragraphs, and an overall statement, but there is no clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, yet the internal grouping of ideas is confused, particularly in the third paragraph where multiple activities are abruptly mixed together. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inaccurately, such as 'To initiate with', which sounds unnatural and unidiomatic in an academic report. Reference words and logical connectors fail to guide the reader smoothly from one trend to the next. To improve in this area, the writer needs to group related data logically—such as comparing rising and falling trends—and use a wider, more accurate range of cohesive markers to connect sentences and paragraphs fluidly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with noticeable errors that occasionally hinder communication. The writer frequently relies on basic and repetitive terms, and attempts at less common vocabulary often result in awkward word choice or spelling mistakes, such as 'polyline graph', 'performaces', and 'flucation'. Collocations are also weak, as seen in phrases like 'highest number of participants take part'. Spelling errors and incorrect word forms recur throughout the text. To achieve a higher band, the student should expand their range of vocabulary for describing statistical data and trends, ensuring correct word forms, precise terminology, and accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences combined with faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions within grammatical patterns. Examples include 'The given polyline graph illustrate', 'number of participants take part', and 'its fluctuate up to 55'. These frequent errors disrupt the flow of reading and occasionally cause confusion regarding the timing and direction of the trends. To progress, the student must improve their control over basic grammatical structures, ensure consistent and correct tense usage for past data, and reduce the frequency of basic errors in agreement and sentence construction.
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