Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The line graph illutrates the number of participants in five different activities at a social Melbourne, Australlia, between 2000 and 2020.
Overall, the film club remained the most popular activity among all the activities. Moreever, there are different other activities like Martial art, Amateur dramatics, Table tennis and Musical performances.where number of participants participate in it.
Between 60 to 70 partcipants participate in Film club. In Martial art activity 30 to 40 participants have participate. The line graph of Amateur dramatics is decreased between 2000 to 2010, then increased from 2010 to 2020. where 55 particepents participate in to the activity.
The line grqph of Table tennis activity is remained same from 2000 to 2010 where 15 to 20 participents particpate. Then the line graph decreased between 2010 to 2020, where 5 participants participate. In 2005 the Musical performences activity has been held, where 15 participants participate between 2005 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by mentioning several activities from the line graph, but it does so only minimally. The overview is very basic, stating simply that the film club was the most popular, and it misses a clear summary of overall trends. Furthermore, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data: for instance, the writer claims the amateur dramatics line decreased and then increased to 55 participants, whereas the graph actually shows a sharp decline down to 6 participants by 2020. Similarly, table tennis is described as decreasing to 5 participants after 2010, which contradicts the upward trend visible in the data. Because the information is frequently misread and key comparisons are lacking, the response remains at a foundational level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organisation in the text, with an introductory sentence followed by body paragraphs detailing different activities. However, there is no clear overall progression, and the arrangement of information feels disjointed. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the abrupt transition 'Moreever, there are different other activities' and the repetitive use of 'where' to introduce data points (e.g., 'where 55 particepents participate in to the activity'). Paragraphing is attempted, but individual paragraphs lack internal cohesion and logical sequencing, resulting in a somewhat confusing flow for the reader.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'number', 'participants', and 'activity'. There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'illutrates', 'Australlia', 'Moreever', 'partcipants', and 'performences'. Less common lexical items are rarely attempted, and when the writer tries to use more complex phrasing, inaccuracies occur, such as 'Martial art activity' instead of 'participants in martial arts'. These errors and the limited range place the lexical score at this level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammar demonstrates a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences alongside faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'The line graph of Amateur dramatics is decreased', 'participants have participate', and 'participate in to the activity'. Punctuation is also problematic, including sentence fragments like 'where number of participants participate in it' and misplaced periods. These frequent grammatical errors frequently distract the reader and distort meaning at times.
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