Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph depicts information about numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, it is clear that film club had highest number of participants and they slightly increased every year. while,number of Amateur dramatics particiants were decreased. The most significant change was observed in numbers of table tennis players.

At the beginning of the period in 2000, participation figure for Film club was stood at 65. It then slightly fell to 58 in 2010 and then rise again to 70 in the year 2020. Furthermore, participation rate for Martial arts was approximately 35 players in the year 2000 and then it shows fluctuation until 2020, when it comes to 35 participants again.

Meanwhile, Amateur dramatics and table tennis followed a different trend. Initially, they had 25 and 15 number of participants then both had same participation figure in 2010. Afterthat, Amateur dramatics participation rate were fell to 5 before ending the trend in 2020 and the participation figure were increased to 55 in 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by summarising the main features of the line graph, but it only partially covers the requirements. While you correctly identify the film club as having high participation and point out changes in table tennis and amateur dramatics, the overall summary in the second paragraph contains inaccuracies, stating that participation in the film club 'slightly increased every year' when it actually fluctuated. Furthermore, some of the specific figures reported in the body paragraphs, such as stating that the film club started at 65 or that table tennis reached 55 in 2020, deviate from the visual data. The overview is underdeveloped, and key features are not consistently supported with accurate data, which limits the effectiveness of your response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response demonstrates some organisation with an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas, and the paragraphing is somewhat awkward. For instance, the second body paragraph awkwardly mixes details about the film club and martial arts. Cohesive devices are used, but they are sometimes mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'At the beginning of the period', 'It then', and 'Afterthat'. Referencing and linking between sentences occasionally become unclear, making the logical flow disjointed. To achieve a higher band, you need to ensure that every paragraph has a clear thematic focus, that cohesive devices are used more naturally to connect ideas smoothly, and that the progression from the overview to specific details follows a logical structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary range is limited but minimally adequate for the task. You attempt some less common vocabulary, such as 'participation figure' and 'fluctuation', but these are accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, form, and spelling, such as 'particiants', 'Afterthat', and awkward phrasing like 'participation rate for Martial arts was approximately 35 players'. Spelling and word-choice errors occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader. To improve your lexical score, you should focus on using more precise terms for visual data trends (e.g., verbs like 'fluctuated', 'declined', or 'surged') and ensure correct word forms and spelling throughout your response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use a limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside a few attempts at complex sentences, which are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies and subject-verb agreement issues, such as 'film club had highest number', 'participation figure... was stood at', 'participation rate... were fell', and 'the participation figure were increased'. Punctuation and article use also show frequent errors that can occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate better control over basic and complex grammatical structures, ensuring accurate verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions.

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