Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the number of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia.
overall, the graph shows the participants for the period of 2000 to 2020. The different activities are film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, tabble tennis and musical performances.
In the year 2000, the number of participants in film club are 63 and it goes with a flow at a constant level. But in 2010 it declines little bit, but also rises and reaches to 65 at 2020. Accordingly, the people in martial arts are changing slowly year by year. At 2000, it is at 35 and reaches to 32 in 2005. Likewise, in 2010 it become 38 and in 2015 it starts decline slowly and again increase in 2020.
The participants of amateur dramatics and table tennis are increase and decrease samely, but participants of table tennis increase gradually at high level at reach at 53 umber in 2020, whereas the participants of amateur dramatics decrease at reach at very low level from all. Furthermore, the people in musical performances only participants from 2005 and only few people are engaged. 27 people are participating in musical performances in 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to present an overview of the line graph, but it only partially addresses the task requirements. While the writer mentions several general trends, the selection of data is erratic and contains significant inaccuracies. For instance, the student reports that 27 people participated in musical performances in 2020, whereas the graph indicates a figure closer to 18. Furthermore, the overview lacks clarity regarding the overall trends across the period, and some parts of the task are underdeveloped or confusingly described. The response presents limited and occasionally contradictory information, meaning it does not fully or accurately cover all parts of the visual data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organisation in the essay, with paragraphs dedicated to introducing the chart and discussing individual categories, but there is no clear overall progression or logical structure guiding the reader through the main features. Cohesive devices are used minimally and sometimes inaccurately, such as the sudden transition 'Accordingly, the people in martial arts are changing slowly year by year.' Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information feels disjointed rather than logically sequenced. Additionally, referencing is occasionally unclear, which weakens the overall flow and makes the connections between ideas mechanical rather than natural.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with noticeable errors in word choice and spelling that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. For example, the writer misspells 'tabble tennis' and uses imprecise phrasing such as 'goes with a flow at a constant level' or 'increase and decrease samely'. While the student attempts to use vocabulary related to trends (e.g. 'declines', 'increases', 'constant level'), awkward collocations and word forms prevent the response from achieving a higher score. Less common vocabulary is attempted but lacks precision and natural control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer employs a very limited range of sentence structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with occasional, faulty attempts at complex forms. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g. 'the number of participants in film club are', 'the people in martial arts are changing'), incorrect verb tenses, and awkward prepositions. For example, expressions like 'reaches to 65 at 2020' and 'decrease at reach at very low level' demonstrate persistent errors in grammatical patterns. These frequent mistakes place a strain on the reader, though the core meaning can still be understood with some effort.
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