Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph illustrates data about various activities and its numbers of participants at one of the social centres in Malbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020. Film club had highest participants at 62 in 2000 and fluctuated in between 2005 to 2015. Then it increased until 2020 to 62 participants as it was in the beginning. The film club had the highest competitors throughout the period of 2000 to 2020.
There were no participants for musical performances until 2005. Later competitors started to take part in musical performances and the numbers of participants increased to 11 in 2010, continuously it was increasing up to 17 in 2020.
Table tennis started with 17 players in 2000 and rose to 52 in 2020. In 2010 table tennis had 20 players whereas overtake the numbers of Amateur dramatics participants. Participation of Amateur dramatics players declined from 2005 to 2020. Finally there were 5 participants in 2020 and had the lowest number of players. Martial arts began at 38 artists in 2000 and had the same number of participants in 2020 with a fluctuation in between 2005 to 2015.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the task partially, attempting to present an overview of the data provided in the graph. However, the selection of data is erratic and lacks clarity. For instance, the student states that the Film club had 62 participants in 2000 and 2020, but misreads some details or expresses trends in a mechanical fashion. Furthermore, there is a tendency to use inappropriate vocabulary such as referring to participants as 'competitors' or 'artists', which impacts the precise coverage of the information. While some main features are outlined, ideas are under-developed and lack a well-structured overall comparison of the categories.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
There is some organisation evident in the writing, as the student attempts to separate different categories into distinct sentences or mini-paragraphs, but there is no clear overall progression across the text. Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or repetitive, and referencing is not always clear, such as abruptly shifting between categories like 'Table tennis' and 'Amateur dramatics' without smooth logical transitions. The paragraphing is rudimentary, and the relationships between the changing trends of different social centre activities are not fluidly connected, leaving the progression disjointed in places.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The lexical resource is limited but minimally adequate to convey basic information about the graph. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, but this leads to noticeable errors and inappropriate word choices, such as calling club members 'competitors' or referring to Martial arts participants as 'artists'. There are also spelling and geographical slips like 'Malbourne'. These lexical inaccuracies cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the vocabulary from achieving the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside basic past and present tense constructions. Attempts at complex sentence forms are often faulty, as seen in awkward phrasing like 'whereas overtake the numbers of Amateur dramatics participants'. There are frequent errors in prepositions, articles, and verb agreement, such as 'Film club had highest participants' and 'its numbers of participants', which can cause confusion for the reader, though the core meaning of the figures usually remains decipherable.
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