Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 19 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of people participate in differnet activities (film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, musical performance) at one of the social center in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.

Overall, for most of the period given table tennis is seen increasing participants, while amateur dramatics declined mostly. There is a significant increase in the participation in musical performance whereas, film club and martial arts fluctuated in whole period.

Table tennis participants rose dramtically starting from just under 20 people in 2000 to reaced a peak at 50 in 2020. While in ameteur dramatics number of participants decrease dramatically after starting from 27 people in 2000 to 30 in 2005 after decrease to just 5 in 2020, compared to musical performace where people starting to join this program in 2005 from 10 participant in 2010 to almost 20 in 2020.

Film club has the most people participates throughout the period it started from 2000 where it had 65 people but starting to seen slight decline it reaches to 60 in 2010, but get stable in 2020 by 65 people again. On the other hand for martial arts it is seen to be same pattern it starts from just under 40 people in 2000 decrease marginally to 30 people in 2005 after reached a peak at 40 people in 2010 after it gets stable throughout the period.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You provide a clear overview of the main patterns: table tennis rises strongly, amateur dramatics falls, musical performances grow, and film club and martial arts fluctuate. You also identify the film club as the largest activity throughout, which is supported by the graph. Most figures are close to the chart, but a few details are inaccurate: table tennis reaches about 54, rather than 50, in 2020; musical performances begin at zero in 2000, not with participants joining in 2005; and martial arts falls to about 34 in 2015 before returning to 36, rather than remaining stable after 2010. The response covers all five activities and supports its overview with data, though greater precision in these comparisons would strengthen it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping the activity trends. This makes the main comparisons easy to follow, and transitions such as “Overall” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships. The progression is not always smooth, however. The sentence beginning “While in amateur dramatics” is awkwardly attached to the table-tennis point, and the musical-performance comparison is crowded into the same sentence. Some linking phrases, including “after it gets stable,” do not clearly express the sequence shown. To move beyond this level, give each comparison a complete, clearly structured sentence and use time markers consistently so the reader can follow changes from one year to the next.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “declined,” “fluctuated,” “significant increase,” and “peak,” so the reader can understand the broad patterns. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, as in “differnet,” “dramtically,” “ameteur,” and “performace.” Several phrases are also unnatural or imprecise: “increasing participants,” “most people participates,” and “same pattern” do not express the data idiomatically. Use standard collocations such as “the number of participants increased” and “followed a similar pattern.” More accurate spelling and a wider range of precise trend language would make the report clearer and more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses with “while” and “whereas,” but complex sentences are often faulty and errors recur. For example, “The line graph illustrates the number of people participate” needs a relative clause or gerund construction, while “it started from 2000 where it had 65 people” has an unclear clause structure. Subject–verb agreement is also inconsistent in “Film club has the most people participates,” and several sentences lack clear punctuation or contain run-on structures, particularly the paragraph comparing amateur dramatics and musical performances. These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Practise building shorter, accurate sentences first, then combine them with correctly formed subordinate clauses and consistent past-tense reporting.

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